The Perfect Pieces Ch. 01

This looks promising

and the author has a great track record. I look forward to further chapters.

good start.

this could be something good. now let Lori off the hook.

Yeah, a new Dreamcloud story! I confess that when he doesn't have an active story going, I check in on the Romance section every day just to see if something new has dropped from him.

Excellent. Looking forward to seeing how this goes.

It was just YESTERDAY...

That I was on your submissions page, reading some rare DC stuff from other categories that I had missed, and wondering when I would hear from my favorite author. Then BAM! Today, an new series, and looks like a good one.
I like the easy to digest two pages, but we all know that when it comes to DC work, length is NEVER a problem. Nice characters, always your strength, and I feel that this intro is just fine.
Thanks so much! Hope chpt 2 is tomorrow, as I need a new series to follow....
See ya then! :)

about time

Ive been coming back to your page almost every day - waiting waiting,
well come on don't dally get moving - Im sure this will be as engaging as all your stories.
Thank you for the new distraction.

Posting

Chapters 1 - 5 have been posted. Everything goes through a review by Lit and no one is allowed to grab a lot of a reviewers time. It is a fair system. I suspect the chapters will post every other day or so. I will add 6 - 8 today. 9-13 are going through one more round of editing and should be posted by the weekend.

It sounds like posting is a balancing act

Short submissions take very little time to read and the waiting in between can drag on. But too many pages scare some readers off. And once you submit your work for review it is out your hands.

unphased?

I love your writing, but your consistent misspelling of unfazed grates.

Fascinating Introduction

His business is truly special but I do not see where he will get enough customers over time if the city only has twenty five thousand, I can sympathize with his frustrations in the line and with his desire to solve the lady's problem so he can eat. Passing along a favor is always a good idea if they will accept the mechanism.

Masterpiece

This is another masterpiece by DreamCloud - I too would like to thank Lori!

@Bruce22 - re "I do not see where he will get enough customers"

Seriously? Maybe he has an internet connection, and can sell all over the world? Or did I mess something, and this was set in 1940?

Bad habit

I usually just go on to the next chapter with multi part stories. Don't rate or comment until the the last piece. Not fair to you or other authors. I'll try to do better but sometimes it's difficult to know if I'm going to like a story with just a part of the whole. Being a great admirer of your work, I'm going to take a chance that I'm going to like it. I don't make a big deal out of commenting on spelling or grammar; not with your stuff. If I really, really like one of your stories, I will probably read the whole thing again. If so, I'll already know what rating to give the pieces.

Intriguing Begining.....

..... to what could be a very great story, by an author whose work I have enjoyed immensely in the past.