I understand it's a short story. But it just seemed..choppy to me. She just met his guy and she's going to go after him like that. Ok, I can take that. But the scene seemed rushed and unsatisfying. I expected better from you hun
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It's a bit...choppy
I understand it's a short story. But it just seemed..choppy to me. She just met his guy and she's going to go after him like that. Ok, I can take that. But the scene seemed rushed and unsatisfying. I expected better from you hun
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