Not Exactly Geared for the Thrill of the Chase Fans
Decently told, but void of nuance or surprise. I'd almost rather hear about his affair with Mary for the inherent complexities of trysting with a married woman.
This story is NOT about a Loving Wife. It is about a married horndog with few, if any, morals, who is in a meaningless marriage. Also, an impressionable young lady who has a bad moral compass and terribly poor judgement.
The story is inadequately edited and is lacking in sexual tension! Glad they are both fictional characters, since the author can, with a stroke of his pen, give them both AIDs and follow their plight as they disintegrate and die!
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Anonymous08/10/15
It's under Mature annony you dukb fuck!!!
It's not a LW or are you done bitching about LW and now moved on to Mature with your dumb ass comments. Fuck you! I gave this a 5
....a little too declarative and somewhat shallow. Try to delve into your primary characters a little more. Try to make them more real.
This would be my kind of story, if I could feel some connection with your characters.
English
Very well done
Wonderful. Never could understand why some women went after jokes when the drama folks had all the fun!!E652
OK
I think this story was just OK. No suspense, no character development. I'd give it two stars at best.
Not Exactly Geared for the Thrill of the Chase Fans
Decently told, but void of nuance or surprise. I'd almost rather hear about his affair with Mary for the inherent complexities of trysting with a married woman.
LW?
This story is NOT about a Loving Wife. It is about a married horndog with few, if any, morals, who is in a meaningless marriage. Also, an impressionable young lady who has a bad moral compass and terribly poor judgement.
The story is inadequately edited and is lacking in sexual tension! Glad they are both fictional characters, since the author can, with a stroke of his pen, give them both AIDs and follow their plight as they disintegrate and die!
It's under Mature annony you dukb fuck!!!
It's not a LW or are you done bitching about LW and now moved on to Mature with your dumb ass comments. Fuck you! I gave this a 5
Good Read****
Thanks for sharing
Well written....
....a little too declarative and somewhat shallow. Try to delve into your primary characters a little more. Try to make them more real.
This would be my kind of story, if I could feel some connection with your characters.
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