I thought the story started off fine but lost its way at the end. It should have retained the idea of revenge on the cheating husband for that erotic edge. As it stands it seems to recall a real life but ho hum incident.
Sorry, guys, but I disagree - our intrepid author never said "nameless bimbo," she just called the secretary a bimbo, period.
I also kind of like the way the expected revenge idea gets twisted - sort of a nice turn.
My only complaint was the fact that the translation is somewhat imperfect, thus distracting me a bit. Otherwise, a nice little story. If I spoke French, I'd offer to translate the other stories here.
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Lost its way
I thought the story started off fine but lost its way at the end. It should have retained the idea of revenge on the cheating husband for that erotic edge. As it stands it seems to recall a real life but ho hum incident.
I thought the ending just fine.........
Use your imagination as to the possible events of the future----And remember, revenge is a dish best served cold---
Didn't think through, did ya?
From what you wrote, it is apparent that the nameless bimbo has no idea who her companion's ex is. Yeah. Right.
If you can't be bothered to cover such a major plot point, don't bother writing it at all.
I disagree-Living life happily is the Best Revenge
First I disagree with the comment about keeping the ending to revenge.
The best revenge is the Enjoy life and if its with the person that you husband or wife ran off with .... so be it!
I love your writing... and was pleasantly surprised by the ending!
Please keep writing.
sorry, I disagree
Sorry, guys, but I disagree - our intrepid author never said "nameless bimbo," she just called the secretary a bimbo, period.
I also kind of like the way the expected revenge idea gets twisted - sort of a nice turn.
My only complaint was the fact that the translation is somewhat imperfect, thus distracting me a bit. Otherwise, a nice little story. If I spoke French, I'd offer to translate the other stories here.
Revenge
I very much think you should continue with this story i think it should go further.
Revenge
I very much think you should continue with this story i think it should go further.
Revenge
I very much think you should continue with this story i think it should go further.
Revenge
I very much think you should continue with this story i think it should go further.
Revenge
I very much think you should continue with this story i think it should go further.
awesome!!!
awesome
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