The Perfect Pieces Ch. 08

Great Story

And you almost deleted it? Perhaps the rest of us who write ought to be trolling through your trash for ideas, concepts, new ways to describe actions and emotions. You are doing such a good job showing why all the conventional ways this story could turn out are unsatisfactory.

Loving it, but a (very) minor correction

At one point your protagonist/narrator says that he smells "ode de Amber".

I believe that what he meant was "Eau de Amber".

"Eau de" is French for "Water of", and some perfumes are named "Eau de [whatever]" to imply that the perfume is the very essence of [whatever]. Stereotypically, the [whatever] is the first name of an iconic celebrity, implying that the perfume will make the wearer smell like that celebrity.

Here is an animated Disney short titled "Eau de Minnie", in which Minnie Mouse has created a perfume: http://disney.wikia.com/wiki/Eau_de_Minnie

Here is an actual perfume named "Eau de Chloe": https://www.google.com/search?as_q=&as_epq=eau+de&a s_oq=&as_eq=&as_nlo=&as_nhi=&lr=&cr=&as_qdr=all&as _sitesearch=&as_occt=any&safe=images&as_filetype=&a s_rights=&gws_rd=ssl#as_qdr=all&q=eau+de+chloe

I am enjoying the story immensely, and am looking forward to reading the rest of its chapters.

-Rei

Eau de or Ode de

I have a tendency to write with abandon. You are correct ReiDeBastos, it should have been Eau de. Though I could stretch the meaning of 'ode' to wrap the poetic scent of Amber (a weak argument at best). My errors, though lessening, are prevalent. Tim and I are learning as we hack our way through stories. The English language is a beast I have yet to tame - what made me think I should dabble in French?

This has the makings of a classic!

I look forward to each new episode.
Well written and good grammatically. (Unlike the output of so many writers on this site).

Great story so far....

I was hesitant to start this story because I thought it was going to be about some guy hooking up with a girl from a glass store. Boy was I ever wrong. I love it so far.

Love the story, but chapter size is too short for a single post!

Hi great story as ever,

I assume you are trialling a different style with the chapters (moved from Very long to almost too short) and maybe they'll work when its not being read as you post, but for non literary purposes I'd prefer two chapters semi linked together / or just posted together. Every time we get going with the story, we have to break and wait for the next instalment... just a thought

Continues to fascinate!

DC--Your story continues to be enticing and fascinating. The love between Mark and Amber is palpable, and so is the tension (and Amber's fear!) as the confrontation with Pablo approaches. Thank you for another great segment; I will be looking eagerly for ch. 9 tomorrow!

Delightful Tale

It is not a strait forward romance, it is more of a novella with mystery. I really broke up when the extra key stroke turned "heroin" into "heroine"! Continue amusing yourself please!

Love the story, but found a small nitpick. His ear could be "lost in ode de Amber", but his nose would be lost in eau de Amber.

ode de Amber / eau de Amber

I can barely write in English and here I attempted to dabble in French.

I blame the American school system for every error I make. Specifically, Ms. Crumbacher, my eighth grade English teacher. How is someone going through puberty supposed to pay attention with a teacher who looked like a goddess?

don't forget the Y

died her roots - dyed her roots

A bit of a difference :-)

It's 3:25 AM

and I'm trying to decide if this will be another all-nighter.

At 3:55 AM

I agree

Really Enjoying.....

..... this story as the it unfolds -- as all the other D.C. works I have read. Hoping that this author continues to give us such gems.

I'm going to be late --

again! I just need to read one more chapter!