Feeling the Burn

Really good! I only spotted one error, that's not to say there isn't more.

First paragraph;
"Yes, this is would give me what I needed." This reads kind of awkwardly, wouldn't it be better to say; "Yes, this is what would give me what I needed."

Anyway great job.

So visceral!

Wow, Icy Hot? Good work.

This just feels so unguarded and real. I love it. Thanks for sharing.

Love it

I use icy hot, Vicks or toothpaste so I know how amazing it feels!

Somewhere in the middle

Although some phrases like burning breasts and asshole made me laugh, I think your story is nicely done for a short stroker. You've successfully managed to show that your protagonist is one helluva nymphomaniac, if that's what you were trying to attempt.

Toys and Masturbation Category isn't my forte, but I liked reading this one. Well done. I'd rate this a 3* (I didn't actually rate this story, just sayin')



Bard.