Very interesting first chapter, she not really understanding what she's done, he not doing the blustery John Wayne thing & not being a brute or a pawn, but not staying around for act two. You certainly got /my/ interest up. Keep writing.
H. Jekyll
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Anonymous08/05/15
Bitch got more than she deserved
He shouldn't even have put up with the comments about his small dick, but at least he acted when she admitted to screwing around.
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Anonymous08/05/15
YOU'RE tired of reading long drawn out stories? YOU are one of the worst on this site for doing just that! Drawing it out. We will skim if we want to, lets face it, with your writing most of the time we still know whats happened even when we skim through.
Getting pretty boring with ALL husbands in the LW category having a small dick.
And one star when he decides to take the selfish stupid whore back.
Got a 'small dick'? Go marry a tiny Asian girl or something. She'll think you're King Kong. Leave the cheating selfish bitch and find a girl you're more compatible with. To put up with someone running around because of your 'equipment' is an asinine premise born of a real lack of self respect.
told him she cheated.
He left.
OK, pretty straight forward until you put that together with your opening comment:
"There is reconciliation, but not in the traditional 'loving wives' use of the word."
For some reason that makes me even more nervous about the direction you are taking us.
Also included among the Tags is - cuckold - which I have always associated with a wife who cheats, a husband who knows she is cheating, and he allows (sometimes eagerly, sometimes with remorse, and sometimes as an unwilling participant) her to continue cheating and sticks around anyway. At the end of this brief entry they are already divorced, so I don't understand how the term cuckold is germane.
Hopefully he has realized that he has to cut his losses and get rid of a bad influence in his life. His wife and her comments about his penis size are demeaning and disrespectful. Regardless of his size, her comments indicate her view of the relationship as being competitive rather than cooperative. The only decent thing she has done was not to have kids yet and chain him to her in the steel cage match of his life. He is out of the ring, please do not stick him back in there. People do not change.
but not the usual well edited piece from you. Many grammatical mistakes, and more than a few times when I was confused about what was being said. I look forward to the conclusion.
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Anonymous08/05/15
My take on Chapter 1
Excellent and I trust the remaining chapters will be the same... This setup and delivery
is right on... I am not going to address proper presentation in grammar... That is not why I visit this site... Thanks 5 stars
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Anonymous08/05/15
Kind of disappointing
Generally, I enjoy your work, just not this time.
You needed to draw Angela with a lighter touch instead of the usual mindless size queen so common in other stories. Why would anyone like Caden marry such a moron in the first place?
See, that's what makes the this story so pointless... Caden wouldn't have married her when it became clear that she had size issues. Love is fine, but without respect too any marriage is doomed.
But thank you for breaking this up. It saves me from reading the rest. Angela is a poorly drawn caricature and Caden in little more than a stick figure. I was sick of her by the start of the second page.
Oh, and save the intros. How someone reads or skims your work is entirely up to the reader.
Yes women cheat, so do men. But not that stupidly and not that inanely. This "he's my little man with his little weenie and I love him sooooooooo much" is just bullshit.
Yes women cheat but only because something is missing emotionally in heir lives, they dont cheat over cock size, that's what vibrators and dildos are for. For women, it's about emotion, not cock size. This is like the stories in old porno mags.... They just don't happen in real life.
And for those naysayers who whine that no woman would ever act like this, I overheard a conversation between female work colleagues that might have been said by Angela.
I await the other chapters with interest.
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Anonymous08/05/15
4*
You write very well but I am having trouble with the way the story is coming out. Yes it is a story....I get that. Any "man" that would marry a woman that up front tells him she might need something more at times is not really a man. I know there are men out there that have smaller size equipment but they also have egos.
The wife is just simply a selfish, self centred, bitch.
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Anonymous08/05/15
i agree
about the garbage on this site from all the sickos who think they are normal but you are the same as them when you write about people who are smart enough to hold down jobs but no nothing about life. Nobody would do what she did and be in their right mind . The story has to be believable for people to respond in a good way.
Keeping the chapters short is an excellent idea. I like your writing a lot, but stories involving a clueless ditz are hard to pull off unless you are aiming for humour. Good luck.
But she doesn't tell him about the first three or four times she committed adultery? I'm confused. Doesn't that mean she's not honest? You're off to a bad start. Angela is a cheating slut and stupid to boot. Caden is a pussy. Okay, not a knowing cuckold, but still a pussy. Throw me a bone and give me someone with character and principles so I can enjoy what I'm reading.
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Anonymous08/05/15
Jesus, how delusional or hypocrytical can you be
"Second I've been getting tired of some of the long drawn out things I've been reading"
Talk about living in a glass house and throwing stones! Dude you writing the most drawn out and rambling stories on this site ffs.
I gave it 5* in anticipation of more great chapters.
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Anonymous08/05/15
Just too stupid to enjoy. Nothing makes sense.
Why did he marry her? Why didn't they spell out the terms of their sexual relationship before they married? They are married for 3 years and he is just now admitting that her sexual appetite forecloses the possibility of a satisfying love life? So she has fucked around in the past and escaped detection, but now feels compelled to admit she's fucking monster cock? What changed?
And why get divorced? Does he want to marry someone else? Don't tell me its because she's bruised his ego. This clueless selfish bitch has been shitting in his meat loaf since they met. So what's changed about his attitude or self image? Why not at least keep her as a room mate, paying for the house and other expenses, until he finds a woman with a brain, and a soul, and a heart, to replace the skank. I mean, its partly his fault for ignoring her inevitable betrayal. Hell, she as much as guaranteed him that she would be fucking around once in a while to scratch her itch. Now that its out in the open she can stop sneaking around. They need to recognize and accept that they are not compatible. And they are both to blame for not recognizing that earlier in the relationship. Which makes all the drama you are creating hollow and superfluous.
Too bad. Not a bad plot idea, but very poorly executed. When your characters are this stupid and clueless, its like watching Monty Python. I actually thought this was going to be some kind of comedy or satire. But trying to take this story and their marriage seriously is like trying to keep a straight face when a used car salesman is telling you what a deal he is giving you. You need to just walk away. Bye.
I can't stand stories that describe the wives as perfect.
If they're so perfect, why aren't they models making tens of millions a year cavorting with billionaire playboys? No one is perfect so don't describe them as perfection.
And why would she tell him that she got fucked and not have the slightest amount of guilt? She just cheated and proceeded to rip her husbands heart. How would she feel if he told her that he fucked a younger, hotter woman and it was better than six with his wife?
It doesn't make any fucking sense.
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Anonymous08/05/15
I only read the introductory paragraph.
I'll read the story when it's completely posted. After reading your synopsis let me just say this - I think you'll get poor scores. I think the number of "views" will drop chapter by chapter. I think that people will continue to skim regardless of your suggestion. I think that married people either stay together or divorce. There is no middle ground. I think Lit will screw up and your story won't be posted on 4 consecutive days. I don't agree with your "too long" suggestion. We'll see.
She was perfect to his eyes, the eyes that loved her above anything @Whackdoodle... About the story...I'll rate it 3* for now and only for his attitude, even if he has died inside...I'll rate and comment the story in the end...
i read the opening paragraphs and realized it wasn't worth the effort. It appears to be yet another in a long line of "i love you so much you can do anything to me and it's ok in the name of being an open minded 21st century male who sets his own self interest aside to feed his codependence" stories.
He thinks they're enlightened. They're not, just a constant restatement of the author's own pathologies.
I'll check it out later by doing my own form of skimming. I'll skim the comments and decide if I want to invest any time and emotion in this piece.
So he has a small unit. She had to know that. Sounds like she is rubbing it in his face. Does not appear She is fighting for her marriage. After all there are more Glenn's out there. At least he is not paying child support for one of her itches from her past. There is a reason there are less men getting married and more men getting divorced every day. To him I say ' keep calm and chive on. '
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Anonymous08/05/15
You have to love the authors who go on and on about how a small dick still makes their wife cum more than any other guy. This guy clearly has a little tiny cock and has never made a woman cum and now is just desperate to prove that he's not a loser.
Your wife is cheating on you with some big black dudes man, just accept it and wank to it and stop writing shit like this.
Certainly not one of your best, and if I say so probably one of your worst stories. I see it only getting worse from here on, you should go back to your old writing style.. Actual loving wives
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Anonymous08/05/15
Fantastic
Wonderful story thus far. Anxious to see how this plays out with Caden. Keep on writing.
This part is in the voice of the female lead... the male lead is going to come on later.
There is going to be a getting back together - under what kinds of understandings? He also has a POV - what in fact is going on underneath here?
The "hurts so much but is so exciting" take on large penises is interesting and seems more realistic to me. She seems to be searching for something more psychological than physical. She seems to be looking to be dominated.
This throws the story open for a possible "small dicked dom" resolution - which would amuse me no end, and kinda reflect the little I know of doms...
"Caden you needn't apologize. I can understand, but it's all right. Let's get you back home and we'll fix things." – CADEN needn’t apologize?!
She KNEW he had a small penis when they married, if it was that big a deal she never should have married him!
She certainly shouldn't have told him about Glenn!
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Anonymous08/05/15
I like how you've laid this out, Carvohi
Although, if a woman knows the size of her husband to be's dick before they marry, she has no reason to complain later. The same as a man has no room to complain about his wife, if he knew about her parts and pieces beforehand.
When I was married, I was a virgin. My wife, Annabelle, was somewhat more experience than me. Having a long term boyfriend, Tom, before me and then a short termer between us. When I say I was naïve, you can't imagine. All I knew about pussy was something I read in an article once that said a pussy was about as tight as a fist when we jack off. Well, I knew the instant I slide my cock in that Annie was not even close to that tight. She was deliciously warm and wet, but tight wasn't it. Keep in mind, I'm over 7" and pretty thick but I always slid in to my nuts without the slightest problem.
She admitted once that losing her virginity was incredibly painful. She admitted Tom was big, VERY big and it took about a dozen times after her cherry was gone before it didn't hurt anymore. I couldn't stand it and asked her how big he was and she held her hands out. I'd say somewhere between 8 and 9 inches, she said substantially larger than mine. Then she showed me about how big around it was, and it was about HOLY SHIT, in thickness. Fortunately for me, or unfortunately, he cheated on her numerous times and she finally got tired of waiting for him to stop and to ask her to marry him, something they talked about for their future, they both wanted lots of kids.
We married and thankfully Tom had moved away. After about 8 years of marriage with 2 kids, Tom came back through town. I'll never forgive my MIL, but when he stopped by her house and wanted to know how to contact Annie, she told him where Annie worked and she should be there, right then. Sure enough, he drove right to her work where she was a waitress. During her lunch break they had a heart to heart and he admitted stopping by to apologize, he'd always felt bad about how they broke up. She came home from work and never understood what she did at that moment, she broke my heart. It wasn't that he stopped by and they talked for an hour, it was how excited she was to see him, her eyes were shining.
It only took him to the next day to get into her pants again. He stopped by her work again and asked if she would stop by his folks place, he had something there for her. Well, she went, like a dummy and what he had was his cock. And she took to it like a duck to water. Every day for the month he was back visiting, she went to his place before work and after work, getting her fill of a horse sized dong.
It was a friend who noticed them together and it made him wonder. He saw them kiss like lovers, not like friends. By the time Annie broke down and confessed to me, I already had the divorce papers drawn up. I had her served at work when Tom stopped by for lunch, I wanted him to see it happen to her. We were sleeping in separate bedrooms by that time and she was doing everything she could to put us back together, as if I wanted a cheater back? I refused to talk with her about it anyway. My mind was made up, just Caden in this story of Carvohi.
When she got home that evening from work, I was already gone, WITH the kids. I was on my way to my grandparents home about 800 miles away. I made most of the money, she made little and my family was more stable. In the papers were a few pictures my buddy had taken through the blinds that had an opening and you could see not only what they were doing, but also that thing between his legs and HOLY SHIT.
Annie signed the papers and moved back to California with Tom when he went. Later, she told me she did it because what other option did she have? I didn't want her, she accused me of throwing her away, and without family around, what could she do?
I was remarried after 3 years of absolutely no contact with Annie. My wife adored my kids, perhaps because she was unable to bear children. They called her mom and still do to this day. Annie finally tracked me down. I suppose she was taken aback by where we lived, you see, Jodi, my new wife, was of oil money. I didn't know that when we were going out and didn't learn about it until not long before we were married. I still work, along with Jodi, from our business at home, although God knows we don't need the income. It simply gives us something to do.
I didn't hear the knock on the door but heard voices and one gave me chills. I knew Annie had found us. Jodi let her in to the office where I was working and I was face to face with Annie for the first tine in almost 4 years. She looked awful too. Where she had always been just slightly pudgy, she was downright fat. Slovenly, obesely fat.
Over the next few hours all I heard was apologies. We caught up on the kids, they were gone to school, and our lives. She was overwhelmed by our house, 10,000 square feet with 7 bedrooms and 8 baths. Don't blame me, she already owned it! It turned out, Annie had two more kids by Tom, but they had split and that's why she had went looking for me. She cried when I asked why they split and she admitted it was Tom cheating on her again. I guess the enigmatic smile I had on my face was enough for her!
She waited around to see the kids and she was surprised to hear them call Jodi mom and neither recognized her. Afterward, when she left she thanked us and we never saw her again. That was over 6 years ago, the last I knew from a PI, she was a cashier at a grocery store and living in an apartment above it with her, by then, 4 kids. Me? I'm on my way to Spain in a few months on a sheep hunt WITH Jodi, who is one helluva outdoorswoman!
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Anonymous08/05/15
Very powerful start.
I'll love it or hate it depending on how it develops.
Caden's performance as a man and a husband were questioned in a way that most men could not endure. I look forward to your treatment of this dilemma.
Too early for a 5* but I anticipate that you will get us there.
Thanks for sharing your talent and effort.
early on she says:
"To be completely honest there'd been one or two, oh well three, no four times over the past few years when I had to have my hole really filled. Caden never knew. I had to admit none of the guys I tried really did 'it' for me much better than Cayden's little 'twink'."
And yet later on after she cheats with Glenn...
"I went back to my room knowing I had to call Caden. What was I going to do? What was I going to say? I was an honest Injun. I knew I had to tell him."
Why the compulsion to tell him about Glenn, but not about the other times? It is almost like the author forgot about the previous statement and was trying to pawn this off as her first time.
but the start is nothing but a man hating story. Come on, she fucked him and a couple other guys before she got married. He tapped a couple of chicks too. And the by her own admission she was a whore already. She was all ready a fucking cheater and what is it with you giving every fucking thing away. We split everything 50/50, I even offered to pay for the house for 2 years. Why did you have him volunteer to hold her legs apart so Glen could fuck her. Your getting pretty damn close to being a Matt Monroe disciple.
@Huedogg2
Dude, Carvohi can't have a man with any hint of self respect or an once of backbone in one of his stories otherwise his brain would implode. Leaving out even his usual pathetic storytelling of a wife being so fucking brain dead and moronic as to say such hateful things to someone she claims to care about and wonder why he dumped her worthless ass, no one on the receiving end would be anything but the biggest asshole they could be so like fuck would they offer anything except pure spite never mind being the goody two shoes all carvohi's husbands are. As much as I find Matt M's work repugnant, he is way more talented at both writing and storytelling that this author will ever be.
@Drbeamer3333
The worst amateur fanfic sci-fi drivel requires less suspension of disbelief than is required for this authors stories to make any sense.
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Anonymous08/06/15
Will withhold Judgment
I agree with Dr Beamer's first comment about honesty. She had already been unfaithful four times without telling hubby and now says she has to be honest. Obviously this story is a set up of some kind. It is too hokey to be taken at face value. I assume it is meant to be a satire of this type of story. We will have to wait and see.
and was glad to see this one this morning, though I didn't read it until night time. I went ahead and give you 5 *'s, if for no other reason than to piss off all the naysayers. Of course, my problem is usually with word usage. Not many, but I'm just anal about it. Please proof read better.
Now about wifey. I understand what you said it wasn't going to be a BTB story, and I always respect and look for your plot leads and predictions. But this bitch is so self centered, so condescending, and so cruel, it's a wonder Caden had stayed with her one year, let alone three! Fully understandable why he would move out and serve divorce papers on her. She deserved everything she has to go through, even though she doesn't think she has done anything really wrong. Will be glad to see how it plays out with a reconciliation of sorts. (I'll be more stingy with stars if you don't proof read better!) ROFL!!
A fun start to the story. IMHO every grown woman with some sort of head on her shoulders knows to avoid the size thing if at all possible- the woman is an unaware doofus, but I trust Carhovi to work the story in an entertaining way. Unless there's extreme cruelty and maiming in store... Hope not...
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Anonymous08/06/15
really?
a woman this dumb cannot be real. crawl back into your hole, little wimp.
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Anonymous08/06/15
I find it somewhat difficult to believe a character....
.....that takes her husband so lightly that she has four flings in three years and is so blasé about it she easily enters into the "giant cock" realm and then tells him point blank for the first time what she's doing and that she'll be at it again the next night.
While I know for a fact that there are people out there that are so narcissistic and self important that they could actually behave this way. But not a single one of them is married nor has ever been married for more than two years. They are unable to maintain a marriage. They say they love someone or are in love with someone, but then they behave in a disloyal and dishonorable way toward them and do so at their own whim.
I have to agree with other commenters. She did come off as hard to believe. Why did she feel the need to confess this guy after she kept the rest a secret? Her personality changed in the second half of that chapter. She said she never let him know about her affairs because she didn't want to hurt him, then she blurts this confession out in the most callous way like she didn't care. It didn't make sense to me. After that, she went on to have sex with this guy without a second thought, even after she heard him sobbing on the phone.
I applaud you for trying something different. Unfortunately, cuckold stories only have a few plotlines, and most of them come off as unbelievable. I will finish this series though, because you are a good author.
You caught me by surprise. I thought this was going to intertwine the cuckold theme and he would learn to accept. I must admit, I do realize this is the first chapter. Anyway, for those who read this type of story inspite of the disclaimer, you got him to serve her. How that is more entertaining, I do not know. You have a unique style. I plan to read more.
English
Keep it going Carvohi
Very interesting first chapter, she not really understanding what she's done, he not doing the blustery John Wayne thing & not being a brute or a pawn, but not staying around for act two. You certainly got /my/ interest up. Keep writing.
H. Jekyll
Bitch got more than she deserved
He shouldn't even have put up with the comments about his small dick, but at least he acted when she admitted to screwing around.
YOU'RE tired of reading long drawn out stories? YOU are one of the worst on this site for doing just that! Drawing it out. We will skim if we want to, lets face it, with your writing most of the time we still know whats happened even when we skim through.
Getting pretty boring with ALL husbands in the LW category having a small dick.
I THINK THAT CHIPMUNK
is looking for a David Seville. TK U MLJ LV NV
Five stars for chapter one.
And one star when he decides to take the selfish stupid whore back.
Got a 'small dick'? Go marry a tiny Asian girl or something. She'll think you're King Kong. Leave the cheating selfish bitch and find a girl you're more compatible with. To put up with someone running around because of your 'equipment' is an asinine premise born of a real lack of self respect.
She cheated
told him she cheated.
He left.
OK, pretty straight forward until you put that together with your opening comment:
"There is reconciliation, but not in the traditional 'loving wives' use of the word."
For some reason that makes me even more nervous about the direction you are taking us.
Also included among the Tags is - cuckold - which I have always associated with a wife who cheats, a husband who knows she is cheating, and he allows (sometimes eagerly, sometimes with remorse, and sometimes as an unwilling participant) her to continue cheating and sticks around anyway. At the end of this brief entry they are already divorced, so I don't understand how the term cuckold is germane.
Common Sense
Hopefully he has realized that he has to cut his losses and get rid of a bad influence in his life. His wife and her comments about his penis size are demeaning and disrespectful. Regardless of his size, her comments indicate her view of the relationship as being competitive rather than cooperative. The only decent thing she has done was not to have kids yet and chain him to her in the steel cage match of his life. He is out of the ring, please do not stick him back in there. People do not change.
Enjoyed it
but not the usual well edited piece from you. Many grammatical mistakes, and more than a few times when I was confused about what was being said. I look forward to the conclusion.
My take on Chapter 1
Excellent and I trust the remaining chapters will be the same... This setup and delivery
is right on... I am not going to address proper presentation in grammar... That is not why I visit this site... Thanks 5 stars
Kind of disappointing
Generally, I enjoy your work, just not this time.
You needed to draw Angela with a lighter touch instead of the usual mindless size queen so common in other stories. Why would anyone like Caden marry such a moron in the first place?
See, that's what makes the this story so pointless... Caden wouldn't have married her when it became clear that she had size issues. Love is fine, but without respect too any marriage is doomed.
But thank you for breaking this up. It saves me from reading the rest. Angela is a poorly drawn caricature and Caden in little more than a stick figure. I was sick of her by the start of the second page.
Oh, and save the intros. How someone reads or skims your work is entirely up to the reader.
A man writing about a woman has no clue
Mindless bimbo size queens are like unicorns. Rare and fake. No woman runs around mindlessly on a husband like that and disrespects him like that?
Wrong category: Sci-Fi
1 star.
Clarification
Yes women cheat, so do men. But not that stupidly and not that inanely. This "he's my little man with his little weenie and I love him sooooooooo much" is just bullshit.
Yes women cheat but only because something is missing emotionally in heir lives, they dont cheat over cock size, that's what vibrators and dildos are for. For women, it's about emotion, not cock size. This is like the stories in old porno mags.... They just don't happen in real life.
Good story.
And for those naysayers who whine that no woman would ever act like this, I overheard a conversation between female work colleagues that might have been said by Angela.
I await the other chapters with interest.
4*
You write very well but I am having trouble with the way the story is coming out. Yes it is a story....I get that. Any "man" that would marry a woman that up front tells him she might need something more at times is not really a man. I know there are men out there that have smaller size equipment but they also have egos.
The wife is just simply a selfish, self centred, bitch.
i agree
about the garbage on this site from all the sickos who think they are normal but you are the same as them when you write about people who are smart enough to hold down jobs but no nothing about life. Nobody would do what she did and be in their right mind . The story has to be believable for people to respond in a good way.
5* & FAV!
Really enjoying this very well written story thx
I Like It
Keeping the chapters short is an excellent idea. I like your writing a lot, but stories involving a clueless ditz are hard to pull off unless you are aiming for humour. Good luck.
She honest
But she doesn't tell him about the first three or four times she committed adultery? I'm confused. Doesn't that mean she's not honest? You're off to a bad start. Angela is a cheating slut and stupid to boot. Caden is a pussy. Okay, not a knowing cuckold, but still a pussy. Throw me a bone and give me someone with character and principles so I can enjoy what I'm reading.
Jesus, how delusional or hypocrytical can you be
"Second I've been getting tired of some of the long drawn out things I've been reading"
Talk about living in a glass house and throwing stones! Dude you writing the most drawn out and rambling stories on this site ffs.
Promising start
I gave it 5* in anticipation of more great chapters.
Just too stupid to enjoy. Nothing makes sense.
Why did he marry her? Why didn't they spell out the terms of their sexual relationship before they married? They are married for 3 years and he is just now admitting that her sexual appetite forecloses the possibility of a satisfying love life? So she has fucked around in the past and escaped detection, but now feels compelled to admit she's fucking monster cock? What changed?
And why get divorced? Does he want to marry someone else? Don't tell me its because she's bruised his ego. This clueless selfish bitch has been shitting in his meat loaf since they met. So what's changed about his attitude or self image? Why not at least keep her as a room mate, paying for the house and other expenses, until he finds a woman with a brain, and a soul, and a heart, to replace the skank. I mean, its partly his fault for ignoring her inevitable betrayal. Hell, she as much as guaranteed him that she would be fucking around once in a while to scratch her itch. Now that its out in the open she can stop sneaking around. They need to recognize and accept that they are not compatible. And they are both to blame for not recognizing that earlier in the relationship. Which makes all the drama you are creating hollow and superfluous.
Too bad. Not a bad plot idea, but very poorly executed. When your characters are this stupid and clueless, its like watching Monty Python. I actually thought this was going to be some kind of comedy or satire. But trying to take this story and their marriage seriously is like trying to keep a straight face when a used car salesman is telling you what a deal he is giving you. You need to just walk away. Bye.
I can't stand stories that describe the wives as perfect.
If they're so perfect, why aren't they models making tens of millions a year cavorting with billionaire playboys? No one is perfect so don't describe them as perfection.
And why would she tell him that she got fucked and not have the slightest amount of guilt? She just cheated and proceeded to rip her husbands heart. How would she feel if he told her that he fucked a younger, hotter woman and it was better than six with his wife?
It doesn't make any fucking sense.
I only read the introductory paragraph.
I'll read the story when it's completely posted. After reading your synopsis let me just say this - I think you'll get poor scores. I think the number of "views" will drop chapter by chapter. I think that people will continue to skim regardless of your suggestion. I think that married people either stay together or divorce. There is no middle ground. I think Lit will screw up and your story won't be posted on 4 consecutive days. I don't agree with your "too long" suggestion. We'll see.
She was perfect to his eyes @Whackdoodle...
She was perfect to his eyes, the eyes that loved her above anything @Whackdoodle... About the story...I'll rate it 3* for now and only for his attitude, even if he has died inside...I'll rate and comment the story in the end...
carvohi is a good writer but...
i read the opening paragraphs and realized it wasn't worth the effort. It appears to be yet another in a long line of "i love you so much you can do anything to me and it's ok in the name of being an open minded 21st century male who sets his own self interest aside to feed his codependence" stories.
He thinks they're enlightened. They're not, just a constant restatement of the author's own pathologies.
I'll check it out later by doing my own form of skimming. I'll skim the comments and decide if I want to invest any time and emotion in this piece.
tbd
I'll wait till the end then comment accordingly.....
5 foer your effort and content. I'm sure no one cares
if the little dick man decides or not to read the story, YOU are so sad. Read part and then bitch,. Grow up asshole
Just Like You bonnie
Don't read the story.Give it a 5 Read the comments then bitch about annony.Sound familiar? BTW Look forward to the rest of this.Hope Caden makes out
Not much of a story
Completely unrealistic wife casually has sex with strangers. That isn't a plot.
Boring. Cardboard characters. Trite.
It is part # 1
So he has a small unit. She had to know that. Sounds like she is rubbing it in his face. Does not appear She is fighting for her marriage. After all there are more Glenn's out there. At least he is not paying child support for one of her itches from her past. There is a reason there are less men getting married and more men getting divorced every day. To him I say ' keep calm and chive on. '
You have to love the authors who go on and on about how a small dick still makes their wife cum more than any other guy. This guy clearly has a little tiny cock and has never made a woman cum and now is just desperate to prove that he's not a loser.
Your wife is cheating on you with some big black dudes man, just accept it and wank to it and stop writing shit like this.
One star
Certainly not one of your best, and if I say so probably one of your worst stories. I see it only getting worse from here on, you should go back to your old writing style.. Actual loving wives
Fantastic
Wonderful story thus far. Anxious to see how this plays out with Caden. Keep on writing.
Interesting start
I see this as an interesting start.
This part is in the voice of the female lead... the male lead is going to come on later.
There is going to be a getting back together - under what kinds of understandings? He also has a POV - what in fact is going on underneath here?
The "hurts so much but is so exciting" take on large penises is interesting and seems more realistic to me. She seems to be searching for something more psychological than physical. She seems to be looking to be dominated.
This throws the story open for a possible "small dicked dom" resolution - which would amuse me no end, and kinda reflect the little I know of doms...
Just sayin'
Green-something
Stone Cold
Bitch
Angela couldn't let go of the size issue. Don't know what Caden could have done about it. How big were her breasts? Was her butt too big?
If he'd been smart he'd have backed out when she told him that she might want someone larger. They'd both have been much happier.
Won't Vote Till The End
"Caden you needn't apologize. I can understand, but it's all right. Let's get you back home and we'll fix things." – CADEN needn’t apologize?!
She KNEW he had a small penis when they married, if it was that big a deal she never should have married him!
She certainly shouldn't have told him about Glenn!
I like how you've laid this out, Carvohi
Although, if a woman knows the size of her husband to be's dick before they marry, she has no reason to complain later. The same as a man has no room to complain about his wife, if he knew about her parts and pieces beforehand.
When I was married, I was a virgin. My wife, Annabelle, was somewhat more experience than me. Having a long term boyfriend, Tom, before me and then a short termer between us. When I say I was naïve, you can't imagine. All I knew about pussy was something I read in an article once that said a pussy was about as tight as a fist when we jack off. Well, I knew the instant I slide my cock in that Annie was not even close to that tight. She was deliciously warm and wet, but tight wasn't it. Keep in mind, I'm over 7" and pretty thick but I always slid in to my nuts without the slightest problem.
She admitted once that losing her virginity was incredibly painful. She admitted Tom was big, VERY big and it took about a dozen times after her cherry was gone before it didn't hurt anymore. I couldn't stand it and asked her how big he was and she held her hands out. I'd say somewhere between 8 and 9 inches, she said substantially larger than mine. Then she showed me about how big around it was, and it was about HOLY SHIT, in thickness. Fortunately for me, or unfortunately, he cheated on her numerous times and she finally got tired of waiting for him to stop and to ask her to marry him, something they talked about for their future, they both wanted lots of kids.
We married and thankfully Tom had moved away. After about 8 years of marriage with 2 kids, Tom came back through town. I'll never forgive my MIL, but when he stopped by her house and wanted to know how to contact Annie, she told him where Annie worked and she should be there, right then. Sure enough, he drove right to her work where she was a waitress. During her lunch break they had a heart to heart and he admitted stopping by to apologize, he'd always felt bad about how they broke up. She came home from work and never understood what she did at that moment, she broke my heart. It wasn't that he stopped by and they talked for an hour, it was how excited she was to see him, her eyes were shining.
It only took him to the next day to get into her pants again. He stopped by her work again and asked if she would stop by his folks place, he had something there for her. Well, she went, like a dummy and what he had was his cock. And she took to it like a duck to water. Every day for the month he was back visiting, she went to his place before work and after work, getting her fill of a horse sized dong.
It was a friend who noticed them together and it made him wonder. He saw them kiss like lovers, not like friends. By the time Annie broke down and confessed to me, I already had the divorce papers drawn up. I had her served at work when Tom stopped by for lunch, I wanted him to see it happen to her. We were sleeping in separate bedrooms by that time and she was doing everything she could to put us back together, as if I wanted a cheater back? I refused to talk with her about it anyway. My mind was made up, just Caden in this story of Carvohi.
When she got home that evening from work, I was already gone, WITH the kids. I was on my way to my grandparents home about 800 miles away. I made most of the money, she made little and my family was more stable. In the papers were a few pictures my buddy had taken through the blinds that had an opening and you could see not only what they were doing, but also that thing between his legs and HOLY SHIT.
Annie signed the papers and moved back to California with Tom when he went. Later, she told me she did it because what other option did she have? I didn't want her, she accused me of throwing her away, and without family around, what could she do?
I was remarried after 3 years of absolutely no contact with Annie. My wife adored my kids, perhaps because she was unable to bear children. They called her mom and still do to this day. Annie finally tracked me down. I suppose she was taken aback by where we lived, you see, Jodi, my new wife, was of oil money. I didn't know that when we were going out and didn't learn about it until not long before we were married. I still work, along with Jodi, from our business at home, although God knows we don't need the income. It simply gives us something to do.
I didn't hear the knock on the door but heard voices and one gave me chills. I knew Annie had found us. Jodi let her in to the office where I was working and I was face to face with Annie for the first tine in almost 4 years. She looked awful too. Where she had always been just slightly pudgy, she was downright fat. Slovenly, obesely fat.
Over the next few hours all I heard was apologies. We caught up on the kids, they were gone to school, and our lives. She was overwhelmed by our house, 10,000 square feet with 7 bedrooms and 8 baths. Don't blame me, she already owned it! It turned out, Annie had two more kids by Tom, but they had split and that's why she had went looking for me. She cried when I asked why they split and she admitted it was Tom cheating on her again. I guess the enigmatic smile I had on my face was enough for her!
She waited around to see the kids and she was surprised to hear them call Jodi mom and neither recognized her. Afterward, when she left she thanked us and we never saw her again. That was over 6 years ago, the last I knew from a PI, she was a cashier at a grocery store and living in an apartment above it with her, by then, 4 kids. Me? I'm on my way to Spain in a few months on a sheep hunt WITH Jodi, who is one helluva outdoorswoman!
Very powerful start.
I'll love it or hate it depending on how it develops.
The ultimate insults
Caden's performance as a man and a husband were questioned in a way that most men could not endure. I look forward to your treatment of this dilemma.
Too early for a 5* but I anticipate that you will get us there.
Thanks for sharing your talent and effort.
Contradictory elements...
early on she says:
"To be completely honest there'd been one or two, oh well three, no four times over the past few years when I had to have my hole really filled. Caden never knew. I had to admit none of the guys I tried really did 'it' for me much better than Cayden's little 'twink'."
And yet later on after she cheats with Glenn...
"I went back to my room knowing I had to call Caden. What was I going to do? What was I going to say? I was an honest Injun. I knew I had to tell him."
Why the compulsion to tell him about Glenn, but not about the other times? It is almost like the author forgot about the previous statement and was trying to pawn this off as her first time.
carvohi, I sure you'll disagree
but the start is nothing but a man hating story. Come on, she fucked him and a couple other guys before she got married. He tapped a couple of chicks too. And the by her own admission she was a whore already. She was all ready a fucking cheater and what is it with you giving every fucking thing away. We split everything 50/50, I even offered to pay for the house for 2 years. Why did you have him volunteer to hold her legs apart so Glen could fuck her. Your getting pretty damn close to being a Matt Monroe disciple.
@Huedogg2
Dude, Carvohi can't have a man with any hint of self respect or an once of backbone in one of his stories otherwise his brain would implode. Leaving out even his usual pathetic storytelling of a wife being so fucking brain dead and moronic as to say such hateful things to someone she claims to care about and wonder why he dumped her worthless ass, no one on the receiving end would be anything but the biggest asshole they could be so like fuck would they offer anything except pure spite never mind being the goody two shoes all carvohi's husbands are. As much as I find Matt M's work repugnant, he is way more talented at both writing and storytelling that this author will ever be.
@Drbeamer3333
The worst amateur fanfic sci-fi drivel requires less suspension of disbelief than is required for this authors stories to make any sense.
Will withhold Judgment
I agree with Dr Beamer's first comment about honesty. She had already been unfaithful four times without telling hubby and now says she has to be honest. Obviously this story is a set up of some kind. It is too hokey to be taken at face value. I assume it is meant to be a satire of this type of story. We will have to wait and see.
anon.1
Curious
Too early for me to figure out where the clues strewn about will eventually lead. I'm curious enough to stick with it and see what develops for Caden.
I always am glad to see you post,
and was glad to see this one this morning, though I didn't read it until night time. I went ahead and give you 5 *'s, if for no other reason than to piss off all the naysayers. Of course, my problem is usually with word usage. Not many, but I'm just anal about it. Please proof read better.
Now about wifey. I understand what you said it wasn't going to be a BTB story, and I always respect and look for your plot leads and predictions. But this bitch is so self centered, so condescending, and so cruel, it's a wonder Caden had stayed with her one year, let alone three! Fully understandable why he would move out and serve divorce papers on her. She deserved everything she has to go through, even though she doesn't think she has done anything really wrong. Will be glad to see how it plays out with a reconciliation of sorts. (I'll be more stingy with stars if you don't proof read better!) ROFL!!
Egocentric
A fun start to the story. IMHO every grown woman with some sort of head on her shoulders knows to avoid the size thing if at all possible- the woman is an unaware doofus, but I trust Carhovi to work the story in an entertaining way. Unless there's extreme cruelty and maiming in store... Hope not...
really?
a woman this dumb cannot be real. crawl back into your hole, little wimp.
I find it somewhat difficult to believe a character....
.....that takes her husband so lightly that she has four flings in three years and is so blasé about it she easily enters into the "giant cock" realm and then tells him point blank for the first time what she's doing and that she'll be at it again the next night.
While I know for a fact that there are people out there that are so narcissistic and self important that they could actually behave this way. But not a single one of them is married nor has ever been married for more than two years. They are unable to maintain a marriage. They say they love someone or are in love with someone, but then they behave in a disloyal and dishonorable way toward them and do so at their own whim.
Some problems
I have to agree with other commenters. She did come off as hard to believe. Why did she feel the need to confess this guy after she kept the rest a secret? Her personality changed in the second half of that chapter. She said she never let him know about her affairs because she didn't want to hurt him, then she blurts this confession out in the most callous way like she didn't care. It didn't make sense to me. After that, she went on to have sex with this guy without a second thought, even after she heard him sobbing on the phone.
I applaud you for trying something different. Unfortunately, cuckold stories only have a few plotlines, and most of them come off as unbelievable. I will finish this series though, because you are a good author.
Surpirse
You caught me by surprise. I thought this was going to intertwine the cuckold theme and he would learn to accept. I must admit, I do realize this is the first chapter. Anyway, for those who read this type of story inspite of the disclaimer, you got him to serve her. How that is more entertaining, I do not know. You have a unique style. I plan to read more.
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