That's the only nice thing I can say. That hurt my brain to try and read. Right from the start I tried to place the accent before finally giving up. It just wasn't worth the strain. This has to be one of the worst written stories that I've read on this site. Please have someone proofread your work before submitting anything in English ever again.
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Anonymous11/18/15
well done and ignore the Literotica Snobs.. thinking they are Hemmingway or Poe...
I completely disagree with the stoggy Literotica Snobs (shocker!).... It wasn't broken English, or "painful".... It was an HONEST and REALISTIC story of what REALLY happens in bedrooms and relationships all over the World. Its not all romance (there was plenty of love and romance) fluffy towels and Day-Spa's... Real sex is complicated, negotiated, contemplated and a series of defining concessions. I think ashaw2 did a stellar job at conveying EXACTY what the negotiations in a long term relationship is like. ~R.
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Anonymous11/20/15
Dreadful Read.
You need to either write in a language you know or learn English. Your inappropriate word choice and faulty grammar is just too cumbersome. I couldn't finish the story.
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Anonymous11/20/15
Nice story
Nice story. Don't worry about the negative reviews, haters gonna hate.
Good start. Keep writing.
Ignore the literary snobs on this site.
I'm shocked and stunned at how some people who read & comment on this site try to come off as if they themselves hold a Ph.D.
Hating certain authors/stories is their only way of making themselves feel better about their own crummy lives.
English
write in you native language
This was painful. Work on you English writing skills.
Appreciate The Effort. But,.....
That's the only nice thing I can say. That hurt my brain to try and read. Right from the start I tried to place the accent before finally giving up. It just wasn't worth the strain. This has to be one of the worst written stories that I've read on this site. Please have someone proofread your work before submitting anything in English ever again.
well done and ignore the Literotica Snobs.. thinking they are Hemmingway or Poe...
I completely disagree with the stoggy Literotica Snobs (shocker!).... It wasn't broken English, or "painful".... It was an HONEST and REALISTIC story of what REALLY happens in bedrooms and relationships all over the World. Its not all romance (there was plenty of love and romance) fluffy towels and Day-Spa's... Real sex is complicated, negotiated, contemplated and a series of defining concessions. I think ashaw2 did a stellar job at conveying EXACTY what the negotiations in a long term relationship is like. ~R.
Dreadful Read.
You need to either write in a language you know or learn English. Your inappropriate word choice and faulty grammar is just too cumbersome. I couldn't finish the story.
Nice story
Nice story. Don't worry about the negative reviews, haters gonna hate.
Good Start***
Looking forward to part 02 Thanks for sharing.
good start
Good start. Keep writing.
Ignore the literary snobs on this site.
I'm shocked and stunned at how some people who read & comment on this site try to come off as if they themselves hold a Ph.D.
Hating certain authors/stories is their only way of making themselves feel better about their own crummy lives.
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