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while it is simplistic and tongue in cheek
this is true, over-all, in American culture...
if you drive through downtowns of large cities across America, or if you pay attention to the "rich and famous," (e.g., Tiger Woods and all these other rich plastic/rubber ball players), there are (yes, very cliché, too) a lot of white women who are left high and dry after the "excitement" is gone and, in most case, when the money dries up.... with most with multiple babies, many times each with a different black father...
yes, it is not politically correct to say this, and it may even be seen as "racist," but there is a reason a certain stereotypes develop... black males AT HIGHER PROBABILITY than any other group, for example, WILL LEAVE THEIR WIVES after a while... since MOST of them didn't grow up having solid father figures...
yes, Tiger Woods blonde women's kids are likely to be well taken care off, since he earned so much over the years... but most of these white women, as fictionalized in this simple tale, would never get such support, as they go from one "exciting" black guy to the next, with multiple kids... and THESE WOMEN do really look like shit after a few years...
people who are not into basic science, who let hormones rule over their heads, don't know this: but if you EXCHANGE A LOT OF BODILY FLUIDS with a lot of people who EXCHANGE A LOT OF BODILY FLUIDS WITH OTHERS, you end up getting everyone germs, bacteria, viruses, etc. IN YOUR BODY and after a few years, even if you're lucky not to get very vicious bacteria and viruses, YOU STILL look like shit, no matter how much make-up you use....
look at the exquisitely beautiful blonde women in their late teens to early twenties, when you first see them in these cheap porno videos... and look at them a few years later... they look terrible, scarred, diseased, wrinkled, and exhausted....
anyway.... most Black boys and girls are raised by their mothers and grandmothers, or other family members...
this is just a clichéd fictional story, yes....
but, then, again, we hear all the time of women, young and old, pretty and ugly, wanting to marry the most heinous murderer in America and around the world, from Charles Manson to that Dutch guy who strangled a few young women in different countries (who's now, I think, in some South American prison, with women, again, proposing to marry him!).... so, point is, WE JUST DON'T UNDERSTAND why lots of women do the things they do... thinking they could "make him change for me, because I am special."
wonder
if shes happy now. Oh well so what if shes not. Hope she dies a lonely hard death her daughters didnt deserve this. Never mind her hubby. but seems as if he is still doing ok. Hope he is glad now that he sees what she ended up like. Should have taken a pic to show his kids what mummy turned out like
Good, but a bit dry
I enjoyed the overall plot of this story - the happy housewife who slowly gets addicted to naughty things and eventually succumbs to her lusty desires. It is a great tale, and as far as the scenario you constructed for it the framework is great. What it could have used much more of is detail and sentence structure variation.
Most of the story is in simple-sentence structure, which if there is too much tends to simply end up 'telling' the reader what is happening rather than 'showing'. For instance, you had a great opportunity when Sarah first strips for Tony to describe what she was wearing beneath her gym clothes, how she moves, how excited her body appears at the prospect of taking black dick for the first time... But instead you say 'She undresses slowly giving him a good show.'
Much of the story ends up this way. We are told he fucks into her pussy, not shown how her tight pale lips strain to wrap around his thick black member. We are told he watches her swish cum around in her mouth, not shown how his sticky African spend clings to her tongue and teeth, bathing her inexperienced tongue in a musk and flavor that she becomes addicted to in seconds. Details and descriptions like that would have made your story phenomenal and engaging to read throughout.
I think you've already got the hard part down about coming up with story ideas and constructing their frameworks. Now just spend some time dressing them up with vivid details and work on showing, not telling. Keep up the good work!
Interesting
Sarah played it wrong, I've been used too but have always made it work to get what I want/need and still maintain my life and family.
Puffffffffff
Excellent story... :) pufffff ending... :(
Planning is important
I have been fucking Black Men for going on 15 years now (husband is older & impotent and fairly unaware). With planning and care, husbands can be fooled almost indefinitely. Get what you need and keep what keeps you comfortable.
Meh...
This is more of an outline than a finished story. Take your time and try not to rush your writing process.
Blah
The beginning of this was SO similar to the beginning of "Sarah Cheats", even the same name for the black lover.
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