Caden's Tale Pt. 03

Ok this was BETTER -- and it told us somethgn else about ex wife Angela

I think what is significant about this chapter of the story is that it shows a even more vicious nasty cruel and psychologically disturbed ex wife than what we saw in chapter one

If jeannie is correct and Cadan dick size is average -- then it has serious implications for Angela the ex wife and what she was trying to do in the marriage and her relationship with Caden.

To begin with it says that she was engaging in psychological warfare--- a MIND FUCK-- on somebody she supposedly Loved and on someone who worshiped the very ground she walked on.

In other words Angela did not just cheat this one time in NYC And she did not just cheat three of four times in the marriage before New York .

Angela deliberately engaged in a form of psychological warfare that INTENDED to emotionally intellectually and psychologically scar her husband long into the marriage

WHEN THE BRAIN OPENS UP

and the blood begins to flow you will still have surprises. TK U MLJ LV NV

Good

"A shrike is a big predatory bird. It's said that it attacks and destroys other birds. It'll ruin another bird's nest. It'll kill their chicks. I mean they say it's a bad animal. Sometimes in stories and in movies writers will describe a woman, I mean a wife who destroys her family, who undermines and harms their own husband and their own children as being a shrike." - Loved this, you hit the nail on the head.

Great so far

5*
I´m really looking forward to read the final chapter.

Hard to believe

The guy didn't know he had a Mr. Average dick? Please.
He never once went online to look into his 'problem?' Highly unlikely.

Even if you buy the twaddle about the wife, sooner or later he would have surfed his way to a startling size realization. One online session and he would have realized his wife was insane.

Caden remains the most boring (and perhaps the dumbest) man on the planet.

agree with anon

about how stupid Caden is that he never knew his dick was normal. like alot of other men ive wondered if my dick was "big" enough. So how was i able to put that issue to rest?...... tape measure and google

Except in real life, men are just as capable in destroying their marriage.

this is a crappy story. I feel like I wanted to gouge my eyes out at the idiocy the author was inflicting on me.

What the hell did I ever do to you that you would feel the need to punish me with this abortion of a story? Whatever it was, I apologize. Just for the love of God, don't write anything else. Ever.

Neat story, Theres never anything wrong with a feel good story

good

Good for the most part but some pretty glaring plotholes.

Caden's is almost in the to stupid to remember to breath category and his delusional small dick belief is a just retarded. Getting to his age without seeing another penis either from porn, in the locker room/showers of the gym he's a member of or a school biology class is just WTF. Was he really a virgin when he met the cunt he married and never was seen naked by another woman? Sorry, this just doesn't jive.

All the women in the office think he is a dreamboat, disliked his wife, were big time jealous of her for being married to him along with knowing she was fucking around behind his back, yet never told him. No anonymous emails of "do you know what your wife is up to" or pulling a workmate to the side and telling him the facts?

The guys taking shit about Jeannie at work would be considered to be creating a hostile work environment. Seeing as the company were onto Jeannie and Caden asap when they found out there were semi seeing each other, some asshole's bullshit bragging is sure as fuck to be noticed.

First 2 chapters were good

This one was too long drawn out and descriptive. Maybe this is all necessary for the finale, but I feel that this chapter should not have been more than 2 pages long.

Great chapter. A look into the mind of a cuckold

I agree with Harry in VA about Angela's intent of mind warfare. There are some people who look at relationships as a contest of wills. They feel that they have to have the upper hand. Angela's tactic, while devious, was brilliant in accomplishing this. Making him feel that he had a little dick would accomplish two things:

One, it will make him never go out and cheat on her. He would be too ashamed to let anyone else see his dick.

Two, it would make him grateful that she "loves" him at all, despite his "handicap". When you get a situation where someone gets something that they think they don't deserve, they feel a sense of exaggerated gratitude. They feel lucky to have what they have. They also feel like they could lose it at any point. This keeps them constantly worried and insecure.

It is my opinion, and it is simply an opinion, that this imbalance is the foundation of the cuckold relationship. The woman wants to feel a sense of superiority in the relationship so she constantly lets her man know that he is lucky that she is dealing with his inadequacies. The man, who feels that he isn't worthy of love, feels lucky that a woman who is "above his station" has found him worthy enough to step down from her platform to be with him. Without realizing it, he begins to worship her.

Just think how you would feel if your wet dream of a movie starlet or singer singled you out and wanted to marry you despite all of the other men she could get. Get it? That is how the cuckold feels about his loving wife.

Carvohi has touched on some major issues and provided some good insight. Well done. I can't wait until the next chapter.

I think you have done a great job here...

...and I really enjoyed the way the story developed. Thank you for writing it, thus letting me enjoy a damn fine story. 5*

ok......i'll go for the last chapter

I'll go for the last chapter, but the story is built on a bit of bullshit. The foundation is built on a man's insecurities that are nonsense. And i'd spend about 5 seconds with a woman that put me down or insulted me in any way, shape, form, or fashion. But, i'm still a sucker for a good ending although i wish his former wife would end up with some type of debilitating disease.

Curious

I think the story line is pretty good. You've developed Jeannie as a plausible character. I believe that the circumstances are entirely possible that led to her reputation. Her responses to the main character are inline with what most of us would expect in Real Life.

Caden, well - I agree with some of the others, that his insecurity is a bit extreme and bordering on unbelievable. Perhaps his wife (Angela) had more impact than the average reader can understand... Some things....you have the character quickly jumping to without development; for example: "September" and the accelerated marriage schedule... no further support through the story,

At any rate, "5" stars because I have been waiting for both this and the final installments (there were four...right?). To me, that's a good story lie - when we're waiting for more. Thank you for taking the time to write this.

it's getting more stupid

he is just plain dumb.

You did a great job with this story

I loved how everything turned out. He overcame his insecurities his ex wife drove into his brain. It is rare that two people who where hurt by others in relationships. To come so clean with each other and fall in love . I love happy endings and you made this story work so far.thank you.

Trivial criticisms:

1) Most shrikes are small hawk-like birds whose primary food is insects. There are some species around the world that are bigger.

2) A "pallet" is a flat platform on which stuff is loaded for transport. The "palate" is the roof of your mouth.

I am really loving the story. I'm a physician, and I have known some really insecure men who were put into that state by their women. It's totally possible.

Great story!

I assume you've got at least one more chapter coming.

Couldn't wait.

I was going to be strong and not comment until the final part was posted. But the beautiful prose describing their first night -- so tenderly valuing of the woman the assholes thought of as 'just a fuck' -- got past my good intentions. You have me fervently hoping things go well for them.

Good story

A solid 4 star installment....hoping for a 5 star ending to a very good story.

Let's wait for the few surprises still to come...

Let's wait for the few surprises still to come...Good until now...

Very interesting discussion of the nature of his ex, plus how together they helped each other heal from what others had put on them. I've no idea what unfinished business remains, unless it's with the ex, but look forward to the final installment.

Nicely done Carvohi!

Hit some emotional cords, and that is what a good tale does. Looking fwd to the conclusion.

Surprises?

You wrote as a prologue to chapter 1 " Third, this story is neither a BTB nor a RAAC. There is reconciliation, but not in the traditional 'loving wives' use of the word" Nothing along those lines has happened yet. I hope he has nothing more than a meeting with Angela and does not screw up what he now has with Jeannie.

I don't know!

So far the story has been okay but I wouldn't say it was anything special. Almost an MM story with the small dick plot line. I think that is what bothers me. That and the fact that the guy is so stupid.

The guy is in his late twenties and he doesn't know that 6 inches is normal? I don't care if his wife did call it "little man' that just doesn't play. Also some of his responses to his GF were beyond stupid.

I'll wait until the 4th installment before judging but so far it's no big thing.

Even tho we suffer from the summer doldrums

Thats no excuse to have the read this. It just doesn't cut it.

this is more like a

one woman's trash is another woman's treasure. Angela was a size queen whore while Jeannie was a normal chick with normal insecurities. Jeannie was and is a better fit. Angela is one of the chicks in the end that die alone because she's always after the bigger branch to sit on.

Fuck them

I like it.

This story appears to be written by a "Man-hating" women. Most of the males in this writer's stories nave no balls. A CUCK paradise!

Nice Romantic Ending

Yeah I know that real life is not like that, there is always tomorrow, but I am worried about what Carvohi is going to pull out of his hat. He is good at making us hate and I have a feel there something important to justify the fourth chapter.

A disappointing twist to the story

Carvohi writes a good story, but I was disappointed with the twist this one took. Here we have a man who, for some reason, believes his penis is tiny. He is encouraged in this belief by his wife.

He is (at least) stupid to have not discovered the truth. She is (at least) insensitive and manipulative.

I have never understood the concern so many men seem to have with penis size, but anyhow, that's the big insecurity on which the story is based.

So along comes 'the other woman' who tells him that his penis is actually above average size. Problem solved. At least he didn't have to go for penis enhancement surgery or a transplant.

Carvohi's writing fleshes out his characters well, and it should have been within his writing skills for the male character's offending male organ to indeed be below average and for the sainted 'other woman' to explain to its owner that it is the talent of the conductor, not the size of the baton, that produces beautiful music. Sadly this was not to be.

The two of them working through his insecurity rather than this easy fix would have made a more interesting story.

I realise that I am doing what I accuse other commentators of doing -- trying to re-write somebody's story to suit my own preferences, but this story seemed to cry out for a more complex twist than Carvohi gave it.

L

What Harry said...

Scary to agree with Harry, but I agree with his comment. I didn't like the first chapter, but the second one was better, and I like this chapter. As another commented, one person's trash is another person's treasure. Good story Carvohi.

I can't understand

Why anyone would dislike this lovely story. Carvohi is always good, and always gets far more criticism than is deserved. Ignore the critics.

to expand on luedon's comment

How much love for her husband can a wife have if she can do that kind of damage to his self-esteem intentionally?

You expect your enemies to do you dirty, but friends? Loved ones?

Kind of understand him being confused about his size, years ago the smallest you would read of in Penthouse letters was 9 inches.
If you are one of the many gullible people out there you could believe they were telling the truth.

Wiskey

If you ask a bartender for a glass of whiskey neat, he will pour you Scotch or Irish Whiskey. Jack Daniels and Jim Beam are both considered Sour Mash Bourbon. Makers Mark is a Kentucky Straight Bourbon like Wild Turkey. Tended bar for about 15 years, I started at 20 years old and believe me the old guys in that bar set me straight in a hurry, that was in 1973. The tartness you spoke of in the Jack Daniels is due to the ageing process that used in the Tenn. Distillery.

FORGOT

Great story 5***** on all Chapters!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Poingnent and insightful.

Maybe one of the best discussions of the harpie, or shrike, personality, and behavior. Some real chewable points to consider, like maybe Angela has so little self-worth and self-respect that she has to denigrate the man who is dumb enough to marry her. The Groucho Marx restaurant syndrome. Any man who would marry me must be a loser. And since Angela apparently is a size queen, Caden's cock is an easy target. Following up on what Jeannie said about size and pleasure, it could be that Angela actually experiences pain when having big cock sex, but thinks sex should be painful for her, because that is all she deserves when making love. So Caden's tender normal loving feels wrong, so she denigrates it. Yeah, poor Angela may really be fucked up. Caden leaving her simply confirmed how worthless she is, but she does love him in her way, so wishes him well with a woman who is better than her. Wow, this is really getting deep.

Yes Carvohi, this is your fault. Thank You. Easily one of your most thoughtful and stimulating stories. You know what I mean.

A match made in heaven

You write....me like....5*

Time to burn the bitch and who ever she was with at the party.

Now that Caden's mind is back in the game and a new babe at his side it is time to get out the high test gasoline and Burn the bitch to the ground. I hope the last chapter ties it all together and every man (other than the anonymous killers of most stories) can smile for Caden and his new love! Still a 5* story.

From omega man to beta man

He became a beta from omega man. Jeannie won a good father material after diminishing his insecurities.
The pussy types and sizes follow the Gauss distrobution as the penis sizes. So almost every cock has suitable pussy.

Gosh darn it, golly gee, this is a pretty good story. Sure beats some of the authors who cannot seem to tell a tale without using foul language

Poingnent and insightful.

The reader who left the comments with the above title I think has hit at the heart of the story.

When I read the first chapter on the first page I thought, oh no another cuckold husband story. However what a good story as it draws you in slowly as the characters reviel themselves to the reader. Especially Jen as she has office opinion to over come, plus her insecurities and inner demons to desl with.
I hope in Chapter 4 Angela makes a play for her husband to try one last time to win him back.

Are we in the eye of the storm?

or

?
Time to go read Pt. 04 to find out

What storm?

This could have and probably should have ended right here. A cute little love story. The end. I imagine part 4 will screw it up somehow. And while you managed to get all four parts posted in 4 days, as predicted, your style of writing has steadily lost you viewers. We'll see if you really foul up the ending in chapter 4.

Interesting

It's great that Caden and Jeannie are now a full fledged couple, waiting to be married. The question that needs to be answered is why did his ex-wife fill his head with lies and drag him down when he was a perfectly normal man. She was a cunt who cheated. Multiple times. So what was up her ass? I guess we'll find out.

3*s

A simple story. About a simple-minded man. You never write about his wife, how she mind- fucked him. Over his penis size. His character is not believable.
Besides that point, it's a pleasant surprise. Still earned you 3*s. Thanks Carvohi


AMerryman

Enjoying it

love the twist. Thanks.

Ok the guy had over 6.5 inches and thought he was small? That might be the dumbest fucking thing I have ever read in my life. I mean there is being a stupid guy and then there is being a super fucking stupid guy and this dumbass is not even a little bit intelligent. Teach the guy to learn how to think for himself for a change before next chapter because his stupidity is taxing.

Smooth sailing?

Everything seems too smooth now, so I am looking forward to what comes. Always a good sign that a reader wants to know and cares enough about the characters.

Good twist

"pounded my hound" You made that up out of whole cloth. Nice twist on the cock size and I finally recalled reading this before.