... get a bit puzzling when you leave words out!
Example - "We headed out, letting Barb I would be a couple hours."
Letting Barb what??
Try proof reading your story to check if it actually makes sense!
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Anonymous08/08/15
yes, but
The previous commentor was correct; you do need to proof your stories or get an editor. However, you do have a good story going, and I would like to see it continue. He at some point, now needs to take mother and daughter together, even if there is some initial reluctance.
by
Anonymous08/09/15
4
Good basic story, but use an editor.
by
Anonymous02/23/17
Cheat Cheat Cheat
Cheats on wife with sister then cheats on sister and wife with niece.. this guy is worthless.
English
Things tend to ....
... get a bit puzzling when you leave words out!
Example - "We headed out, letting Barb I would be a couple hours."
Letting Barb what??
Try proof reading your story to check if it actually makes sense!
yes, but
The previous commentor was correct; you do need to proof your stories or get an editor. However, you do have a good story going, and I would like to see it continue. He at some point, now needs to take mother and daughter together, even if there is some initial reluctance.
4
Good basic story, but use an editor.
Cheat Cheat Cheat
Cheats on wife with sister then cheats on sister and wife with niece.. this guy is worthless.
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