Stormy Night Romance

So hot

wow..great way to spen a rainy night

Great use...

...of the storm to match their "tempestous" sex and you timed it well to match what points they were at. This isn't done much in literature (using nature to match moods/feelings, etc.) yet you used it well.

Good detail on the sex with both their feelings, what each did to the other. Supposing this isn't a one-shot deal, I'd recommend you building up their backstory on how they met and how they built their relationship. Otherwise for your first submission, 5. :) Great start. :)

I was expecting a BMWW romance, but full marks for letting us know early on that this was not the case