Cousin, Sister, Who Cares?

Could have expanded story line, needs more, left you hanging

Keep it going

Great story, but

You need to expand, the story has great potential for at least 2 more chapters that could be longer. Other than that, 5 Stars.

OK, so far...

I agree that this stopped too soon. We need at least one more chapter to cover the night, if not more story line beyond that.

I'd also like the sex scenes to be a bit more expository. The one so far seemed to be a tad light on details and therefore light on eroticism, as well.

Remember

A beginning, a middle and and end...

Good beginning, middle just started and you stopped.

You will be finishing this ........

.....won't you ?

MORE! MORE! MORE!

Great start, give us the night and maybe more. Where does this end.

simple and sweet

i love it, i love how short and simple it is, and the flow of the story. it does have some potential to deepen the connection and the story. you could make a follow up focusing on the night at the camp.

oh please we have to have more

you nailed it for me so please keep going