This as my bold title says was a fun read. I appreciate the lengths you went to develop and establish the setting of this story. You had me interested from the start but there was a line that hooked me and bound me to the story, "Pretty sure one is Greek and the other is Old English for 'Please Beat Me Up'..." . This line caused me to litterally laugh out loud. I am looking forward to see what else you have in store for us. This story easily earned 5 stars and my gratitude for the chance to read erotica rather than stroke porn. Thank you!
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Anonymous08/15/15
Very detailed one but
Wealthy parents and living in a two bedroom house? Kinda strange. Probably you'd correct it in the next chapter if it is going to be.
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Anonymous08/15/15
Good Start
Great read. I'm looking forward for more. Don't worry about the house, just because they're rich they are not foolish. They have a house suitable for 2 adults and 1 kid
This is a great start. The way you have started with all their backgrounds and descriptions, makes for a super read. I cannot wait for future chapters.
Looking forward to what should be obvious, additional chapters. By the way I only gave four stars - since I noticed several typos. Spell check and/or an outside proofreader would be useful.
Can't wait to read more. One thing that got to me though. Maybe try to make the dialogue sound more organic? It is fine that they are all super smart, but even smart people can talk normal in every day life. Kinda felt like they were giving lectures rather than a family speaking to each other.
Fantastic story. Can't wait to read how this all plays out. Hopefully the fall in love, his parents and her mother accept that love, marriage, kids and happily ever after. His dad will see their relationship first and most likely readily accept it because he seems be more fun loving with his son
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Anonymous08/16/15
great story please keep the nice long chapters coming.
as others have already said - excellent Act 1 - take as long as you need to get to the inevitable - perhaps even to family acceptance and accommodation
A nice, enjoyable and intelligent read. Looking forward to future chapters.
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Anonymous08/17/15
Great Story!
Looking forward, to seeing how the story develops.
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Anonymous08/18/15
Pretty Good
I dig the slow roll, but the kid's kind of fictionally flawless and that killed the vibe for me. It made him less relatable. Also, if he's as bright as was so abundantly made clear, wouldn't he have a more impressive major than political science? It's basically a step above 'undeclared'. Also, you really stretched the definition of a few words, especially 'dialectical' on the first page. Don't try to force diction because you think it's more impressive if it's obscure. Otherwise though, I liked it. I'd give it 4.5 stars if I could, but I can't so I'll give it 5. I look forward to the next one.
intellectual and selectively seductive. It feels like Alexa's deliberately seducing Alex. Love how her accent is described and her nature. With a body like that, that's going to make for incredible fireworks. Can't wait for more! 5.
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Anonymous08/21/15
Family that could get together before the mother died.
I can't get past the fact that after the grandfather/ father had passed on the whole family did not get together. Karen should have visited her mother the day they buried her father. You lost me right there.
This puts literacy and erotica together. Just about the first time i have seen them joined on here.
One obvious flaw. Why are a two high flying academics living in a two bed house? Don't they ever have guests ? I guess it is essential to the plot but it niggles.
The time frame is a bit condensed too. A jet lagged stranger to a skype sharing hotty in 12 hours. takes a bit of believing too.
Fantastic story! Your literacy skills and knowledge of Europe are outstanding. Wonderfully erotic too.
My only criticism for you is that you had Alexa say "the fall". It would have been more accurate for her to say "autumn". Nothing major but it irked me as a Brit.
Intellect? Actual intellect is a welcome addition in the story. I am satisfied with the detailed beginning of this story. There are some editorial bloopers; I didn't let them distract me. Very good start here; keep it up!
RS
The plot is a bit over the top. Hard to believe. They're too beautiful, witty and smart to be true.
The same goes for the relocations Alexander and her mother did. All over the world and inside Europe. As a European it seems as if you picked places and lugged them together. There is no connection between them or sense why someone would move from one place to another. Cultural differences are much bigger then in the States. Plus the language differences make it very improbable. Oh well, it's just a porn fantasy...
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Anonymous10/19/15
Great read so far.
My only comment is that this story would have been better if he hadn't perved on her with the webcam.
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Anonymous12/31/15
Fantastic!
This is without question the most literate story I've ever seen on literotica. Thoroughly refreshing. I'll be honest: I've not been reading the chapters in order, so I know some of what's coming. The humor and the vocabulary are wonderful---which, again, are virtually unique on this site. If I didn't have to register to do it, I'd check both "Favorite Story" and "Favorite Author." (But I'm an academic and don't dare sign anything traceable that's pornographic.)
I'm normally only interested in incest erotica between relatives that have maximum a decade of age difference between them, although stories with age differences greater than that threshold that are done superbly work for me as well. Your premise of two relatives from consecutive generations being close in age is rare but not unheard of, so I'm glad that clever little trick made it much easier to ease me into this series.
I would give you five stars for this chapter, but the the scene where Alex totally violated Alexa's privacy and trust by training a creep cam into her room is unacceptable.
Your characters are very dynamic and interesting. I'm glad that this story isn't just about relationships, because the characters' academic interests are pretty fascinating.
This is like my third read of this series and.........
I've come to some of the following conclusions.
1. I really like Alex and Alexa.
2. Mom's not really a likeable character.
I say this about mom only because certain actions and words sort of put me off. Her talk to her friends about what great "Breeding Stock" her husband is, doesn't bear out when she only bred with him once.... hence 1 child. Seems to me if she thought he was so great, she'd have had more offspring. Shows a certain disdain and disrespect toward procreation and puts the lie to her statement about excellent breeding stock. Her attitude toward her son is similarly disrespectful. Her comment about him only being alive barely long enough to use his opposable thumbs, knuckle dragger, though lightly delivered underscored how little concern she had for his psychological well being. the constant put downs over the series chapters highlights this. Since she saw him this way, my question would be, if he's like that, who's fault is that? Aren't you the one who was supposed to be raising, nurturing and TEACHING him those things that would ELEVATE him above the "knuckle dragger" level? Hmmmmm? MOM?? Seems mom doesn't like to share knowledge and wisdom with her offspring to make him better than her like most parents would. Seems another drawback to being an ONLY. She never concerned herself with how he must feel growing up alone since his "famous academic and scholarly" folks seemed to be too busy being academic and scholarly to nurture him enough to elevate him above knuckle dragger status. She's too selfish about her own career and aspirations to provide her only son siblings to share the growing up experience with.
Biscuit Hammer, where do you find these angry virgins with mommy issues who keep taking issue with you work? I swear you're paying them to get more comments, lol. Based on one chapter, this PHD-toting god of all things literary has decided YOU'RE the pretentious one.
Sorry, man. He seems to have forgotten he's on a free erotic fiction site. Shitting on people is the limit is the personal power he will ever achieve in an angry life, so just ignore him. We all still love your work.
This does seem to be a very polished story, but I was wondering if you could dial down the pretentiousness a touch. Referring to the feeling of heavy breasts as "indomitable turgor pressure" is to be honest, ludicrous. As a sophomore at a very selective school in the Northeast, I am around a lot of very smart people most of the time and let me tell you, nobody uses this type of vocabulary in their daily conversation, unless they are trying to come across as unbearably pretentious. Besides that, it is a very good story. Keep it up.
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Anonymous12/06/16
It's not a tad pretentious at all...
Nope it's basically nothing but pretentiousness cloaked in the guise of a work of erotic fiction.
English
Fun read!
This as my bold title says was a fun read. I appreciate the lengths you went to develop and establish the setting of this story. You had me interested from the start but there was a line that hooked me and bound me to the story, "Pretty sure one is Greek and the other is Old English for 'Please Beat Me Up'..." . This line caused me to litterally laugh out loud. I am looking forward to see what else you have in store for us. This story easily earned 5 stars and my gratitude for the chance to read erotica rather than stroke porn. Thank you!
Very detailed one but
Wealthy parents and living in a two bedroom house? Kinda strange. Probably you'd correct it in the next chapter if it is going to be.
Good Start
Great read. I'm looking forward for more. Don't worry about the house, just because they're rich they are not foolish. They have a house suitable for 2 adults and 1 kid
Super start
This is a great start. The way you have started with all their backgrounds and descriptions, makes for a super read. I cannot wait for future chapters.
PB
Very interesting premise
great start...I am looking forward to future chapters
Most enjoyable.
Looking forward to what should be obvious, additional chapters. By the way I only gave four stars - since I noticed several typos. Spell check and/or an outside proofreader would be useful.
Great Start
Can't wait to read more. One thing that got to me though. Maybe try to make the dialogue sound more organic? It is fine that they are all super smart, but even smart people can talk normal in every day life. Kinda felt like they were giving lectures rather than a family speaking to each other.
Nice start
You didn't have them naked on the floor going at it right away. Slow build up is good. Please continue.
I love it the cams on each other, who's going to blo first?
excellent
Love the slow build love between them. Hope it becomes more and not stray into decant territory.
Fantastic story. Can't wait to read how this all plays out. Hopefully the fall in love, his parents and her mother accept that love, marriage, kids and happily ever after. His dad will see their relationship first and most likely readily accept it because he seems be more fun loving with his son
great story please keep the nice long chapters coming.
Looking forward to more.
Lovin' it
as others have already said - excellent Act 1 - take as long as you need to get to the inevitable - perhaps even to family acceptance and accommodation
Cannot wait to read more if this story to come. Hope there's more to come.
Dribble
Dribble without fsil
More Please!
A nice, enjoyable and intelligent read. Looking forward to future chapters.
Great Story!
Looking forward, to seeing how the story develops.
Pretty Good
I dig the slow roll, but the kid's kind of fictionally flawless and that killed the vibe for me. It made him less relatable. Also, if he's as bright as was so abundantly made clear, wouldn't he have a more impressive major than political science? It's basically a step above 'undeclared'. Also, you really stretched the definition of a few words, especially 'dialectical' on the first page. Don't try to force diction because you think it's more impressive if it's obscure. Otherwise though, I liked it. I'd give it 4.5 stars if I could, but I can't so I'll give it 5. I look forward to the next one.
Very...
intellectual and selectively seductive. It feels like Alexa's deliberately seducing Alex. Love how her accent is described and her nature. With a body like that, that's going to make for incredible fireworks. Can't wait for more! 5.
Family that could get together before the mother died.
I can't get past the fact that after the grandfather/ father had passed on the whole family did not get together. Karen should have visited her mother the day they buried her father. You lost me right there.
Oh My!
This puts literacy and erotica together. Just about the first time i have seen them joined on here.
One obvious flaw. Why are a two high flying academics living in a two bed house? Don't they ever have guests ? I guess it is essential to the plot but it niggles.
The time frame is a bit condensed too. A jet lagged stranger to a skype sharing hotty in 12 hours. takes a bit of believing too.
Fantastic!
Fantastic story! Your literacy skills and knowledge of Europe are outstanding. Wonderfully erotic too.
My only criticism for you is that you had Alexa say "the fall". It would have been more accurate for her to say "autumn". Nothing major but it irked me as a Brit.
Good Read****
Very interesting and informative read. Thanks for sharing.
Quite impressed
Intellect? Actual intellect is a welcome addition in the story. I am satisfied with the detailed beginning of this story. There are some editorial bloopers; I didn't let them distract me. Very good start here; keep it up!
RS
Alea iacta est???
A latin pun!!!?? I admire your style! Worthy writing!
Hard to believe
The plot is a bit over the top. Hard to believe. They're too beautiful, witty and smart to be true.
The same goes for the relocations Alexander and her mother did. All over the world and inside Europe. As a European it seems as if you picked places and lugged them together. There is no connection between them or sense why someone would move from one place to another. Cultural differences are much bigger then in the States. Plus the language differences make it very improbable. Oh well, it's just a porn fantasy...
Great read so far.
My only comment is that this story would have been better if he hadn't perved on her with the webcam.
Fantastic!
This is without question the most literate story I've ever seen on literotica. Thoroughly refreshing. I'll be honest: I've not been reading the chapters in order, so I know some of what's coming. The humor and the vocabulary are wonderful---which, again, are virtually unique on this site. If I didn't have to register to do it, I'd check both "Favorite Story" and "Favorite Author." (But I'm an academic and don't dare sign anything traceable that's pornographic.)
Creep Cams are not Cool
I'm normally only interested in incest erotica between relatives that have maximum a decade of age difference between them, although stories with age differences greater than that threshold that are done superbly work for me as well. Your premise of two relatives from consecutive generations being close in age is rare but not unheard of, so I'm glad that clever little trick made it much easier to ease me into this series.
I would give you five stars for this chapter, but the the scene where Alex totally violated Alexa's privacy and trust by training a creep cam into her room is unacceptable.
So four stars.
Almost forgot
Your characters are very dynamic and interesting. I'm glad that this story isn't just about relationships, because the characters' academic interests are pretty fascinating.
This is like my third read of this series and.........
I've come to some of the following conclusions.
1. I really like Alex and Alexa.
2. Mom's not really a likeable character.
I say this about mom only because certain actions and words sort of put me off. Her talk to her friends about what great "Breeding Stock" her husband is, doesn't bear out when she only bred with him once.... hence 1 child. Seems to me if she thought he was so great, she'd have had more offspring. Shows a certain disdain and disrespect toward procreation and puts the lie to her statement about excellent breeding stock. Her attitude toward her son is similarly disrespectful. Her comment about him only being alive barely long enough to use his opposable thumbs, knuckle dragger, though lightly delivered underscored how little concern she had for his psychological well being. the constant put downs over the series chapters highlights this. Since she saw him this way, my question would be, if he's like that, who's fault is that? Aren't you the one who was supposed to be raising, nurturing and TEACHING him those things that would ELEVATE him above the "knuckle dragger" level? Hmmmmm? MOM?? Seems mom doesn't like to share knowledge and wisdom with her offspring to make him better than her like most parents would. Seems another drawback to being an ONLY. She never concerned herself with how he must feel growing up alone since his "famous academic and scholarly" folks seemed to be too busy being academic and scholarly to nurture him enough to elevate him above knuckle dragger status. She's too selfish about her own career and aspirations to provide her only son siblings to share the growing up experience with.
Jesus christ you're pretentious
I think i've never rolled my eyes so much
*looks at the comment above*
Biscuit Hammer, where do you find these angry virgins with mommy issues who keep taking issue with you work? I swear you're paying them to get more comments, lol. Based on one chapter, this PHD-toting god of all things literary has decided YOU'RE the pretentious one.
Sorry, man. He seems to have forgotten he's on a free erotic fiction site. Shitting on people is the limit is the personal power he will ever achieve in an angry life, so just ignore him. We all still love your work.
A tad too pretentious, but perfect otherwise.
This does seem to be a very polished story, but I was wondering if you could dial down the pretentiousness a touch. Referring to the feeling of heavy breasts as "indomitable turgor pressure" is to be honest, ludicrous. As a sophomore at a very selective school in the Northeast, I am around a lot of very smart people most of the time and let me tell you, nobody uses this type of vocabulary in their daily conversation, unless they are trying to come across as unbearably pretentious. Besides that, it is a very good story. Keep it up.
It's not a tad pretentious at all...
Nope it's basically nothing but pretentiousness cloaked in the guise of a work of erotic fiction.
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