All Comments on 'The Bonfire'

That certainly seemed more like rape, even though she consented in her mind...but the way he took her....was very much like rape style, and i don't think that fits into this category

There was no foreplay or anything he just shoved his cock in came and that was that.

I looked forward to seeing what else you write. If you continue this story or do something different just keep writing.

This was rape and probably written by a rapist

First of all this was not meant to come off as so "rapey" as many of you have mentioned. I was more trying to produce an organic experience of a girl in her first time of having sex unsure how to -approach her potential partner -how to feel, what her body was supposed to feel like etc - how to react after etc etc . So I apologize if I offended anyone. It's been a while since I've written anything and I was trying to explore new avenues of writing in the sense of trying to make my writing not sound as cheesy and plain. But obviously it didn't work so well for this story. Once again I apologize if anyone was offended

Noones first time should really be like that, but it's just a story, so it's fine.