I Found my Wife on MarriedHookup Ch. 02 Ending 02

Are you fucking with us

Ch.o2 ending 01: I gave you a 3 because I thought this story was going somewhere although very slow. Now this one I had to give you a 1 because there isn't a 0.

Why.....

I wish I could take a time machine and go back and kill the writer's of the season of Dallas that ended with the whole thing being a dream. A horrible horrible mechanic that so many others have imitated this story being the latest in that line.
I was really enjoying it up until this non ending that left me wondering if you thought people would accept this and applaud the effort. Who knows maybe I will wake up tomorrow and realize that reading this was only a bad dream too!!!!

Confused

so ending one was an actual ending that won't be continued? You ended by saying "a plan was coming together." I expected to read about the plan next, and then the execution. But this as an alternate makes no sense.

Wow, the dream ending

is such a copout. Was used in TV series "Dallas" and since then several other times, never with good result. Same with this story. YOu took the easy way out ...had something decent til this.....1 star

Bad dreams are born from fears...

Bad dreams are born from fears...Why was he afraid his wife would cheat? If it was a dream, why the need to two endings? After he got well did he look into his wife emails? ending one just like that was weak, but this one is weaker and too much used in other stories...2*

Hmmmm.....

I liked ch. 1 because it was a strong plot line. It was spicy and full of intrigue and held promise even if it was short and ended abruptly. I liked ch. 2 ending 1 because the intrigue factor skyrocketed, even if it also ended short and abruptly, and came a after a long delay that minimized the cliffhanger effect of ch 1. Then, the next day, here comes ending part 2 which isn't a continuation of part 1 but a word for word repeat until the last line....which is virtually just an "and then I woke up" kiss off.

There is still a live plot line that is good here. I hope you'll consider picking up the story at the point of the cliffhanger in ch. 2 pt. 2 and tell us about the plan he has in mind. Seriously, you started spicy and delicious and ended like quinoa. Please turn the stove back on and cook us up something good!

Cop Out

Epilogue: the guy goes to a therapist because he is a psychotic, insecure mess.

Wow, that had to be one of the most disappointing stories I've read here in a long time if not ever. What happened to your creativity? Such a nice start only to have it end like this.

I agree

This needs to be finished to your usual high standard.

This explanation is old hat on here.

Basically neither of your proposed endings live up to the promise of the first chapter.

Oh Fuck No

I thought this story had some potential and it comes up with this tired old cop out ending? Sad.

Not any better than ending number 1.

This was more like JR stepping out of the shower in Dallas. In trying for a twist type of ending you ruined the story. I felt you started out in chapter 1 with a premise and then you never finished that idea. Chapter 2, part 1 left us wondering what his plan was going to be. Unfinished at best. Chapter 2, part 2 negated Chapter 1 completely, like nothing ever happened. Unsatisfactory ending to say the least. Maybe try Chapter 2, part 3 and put a better ending to this? Just an idea.

two Writers

Chapter 1 was well written and full of tension but ending 1 and 2 are to say the least, weak, it's as if a less capable writer took over. With respect I have to say that I am disappointed.

Bobby Ewing Could Have Done Better

Really?? Great first part, shallow old reused poor ending.

I was hoping that I found another good writer

I am sorry to say, that with this ending, I am losing hope.

What the hell? The best you could come up with is dream sequence? That would embarrass a television Lifetime writer.

You had tension, emotional drama, a difficult situation...and in both cases, you lacked the courage to pull the trigger.

What a waste.

Sad

It is sad you put all the work into the first part and then flaked out on the rest.

This faux ending is shit

1* because there is nothing lower

in the dream who shot JR?

or was the shooting a dream.

Relief

I'm one of the wimps that was very glad you laid in a second ending that let everyone off the hook.

The structure of the chapters was excellent and allowed this kind of flexibility. Yeah, you handled the raising of passions in your readers marvelously well. (Got me going, anyway.)

I'm glad that you didn't pursue violence (aside from having him run over by a car) because that would make everything else just plain suck.

You didn't mention in the second ending whether he checked out the dating site to she if she had been on it. I darn sure would, dream or no dream. Dreams frequently are a way for the subconscious to tell the conscious mind about a situation that the conscious mind is ignoring or just plain didn't pick up on. In my experience I learned to pay attention to dreams. Doing so has saved my life on at least three occasions.

An easy out

Kind of "deus ex machina"-ish ending.
I still like the confrontation meeting with her before she actually committed adultery. Teach her a lesson, etc., etc. That is, if he still wanted her. (She sounded pretty HOT!)
Much more drama in that approach.