All Comments on 'I Worry Boy'

...and still love it here.

Only suggestions that I can make is...'a curse word buried in cheap piss,' I wonder if 'drowned' would be an alternative that might work better.

I think the space added between the last two lines improves it, but in my head I still like the 'and' but it works well with or without.

Excellent Tod, and a well deserved High 5

" Is History repeatin' itself ????"

a Father's legitimate worry .....5-ed .

these words " watching your grandmother's blood mingle with mine

as she sheltered me from the blows with her frail body ..........."

are simply Divine lines , Tod !!

I didn't get a chance to comment on PF&D, I am very glad to do it here. It is a hard-hitting poem - no pun intended. I like the way it moves from the "we" to "I" to "you"... leading through the progression of abusive behavior. You've pulled no punches - a hard poem to read but so very very good. It reminds me of an old art house movie that I thought was set in Oz, maybe in Aboriginal communities, but I can't remember the name of it for the life of me. And anyway, the poem hits on a truly universal problem. "Lovely" doesn't seem the right word; moving, Tod - extremely moving!

just think of all the points traveled on. TK U MLJ LV NV