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Imagination
I can only wonder how you are able to conjure up such a wonderful tale. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Blown Away
They say when you read something you should play a movie in your head. I just got a fucking 4K, 3D, IMAX movie in my head. It was so realistic. You really need to consider becoming published
Classic and complex
It's a classical tale, beautifully written. Lots of great visuals, a lot of great concepts. Wow.
As I read, I find I'm wondering... what 'version' you are submitting here on Lit. Not necessary to answer that, it's just rhetorical, and if I'm not mistaken, as you mentioned, you've changed things and I think in fact it's changed dramatically since you first posted. I wonder what happened to those earlier versions and if maybe they could be made into stories of their own. Seems like you are someone who is rich in great ideas.
I am one of your fans; but there are errors that could easily be changed regarding syntax, grammar, spelling, and even some words are used when another is meant. So, I guess I just wondered if you could use a proofreader/copyeditor, or if you already have this covered....
Such a gem of a story. I'm grateful to get to read it, and, like others, I have put off a lot of things to make room for time to keep reading. I've purchased other Lit authors' works, and so I'm hoping perhaps you'll post if/when you publish.
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