Tristan's Tale Pt. 04

You forgot the Da Da Daaaaaa

Cliff hangers.... Why must if always be cliff hangers

first finished page one of twenty-eight.

while I dread the pauses in between releases, thank you for dedication to doing this right

Fabulous

Can't the just be the next chapter ;-P

Haven't read this yet but...

28 pages!!! Well worth the wait if your previous writing is to judge! I won't be going to sleep tonight I guess!
I'm very excited for this chapter.

Great story

The story keeps you hooked. Very good plot development.

it doesnt get any better than this.

Absolute gold. Please never quit writing

Beautiful!

Simply beautiful!

Great new chapter

Keep going, the quality has been kept up and things are getting interesting!

Favorites

This has been one of my favorites I couldn't leave it alone i had to finish it.

Damn

Holy crap man, that was amazing. After not hearing from you for so long, I'd nearly given up hope. And then this. This chapter was huuuuuge. Not just size/length-wise. It was amazing. Beautifully written, with humor and seriousness woven in, with details and plot mixed together, it was a great read. Can't say enough how amazing it was. Definitely gonna re-read it a few times too. Thank you so much for dedicating your time to this, for all of us, and I hope that you keep writing. I think I'd be heartbroken if you ever stopped :P Can't wait for the next chapter!

Loved it!

This is not only a great story, but you've done an excellent job writing it as well. I'm looking forward to reading what is next for Tristan.

Thoughts

1. You need an editor mate!
2. That bolded 'lol' came out of nowhere, was it intended?...
3. Your descriptions are a little too flowing at times.
4. Why didn't Tristan get to do Alice? Noooo
5. Jades a bit annoying at this point... Just open up already
6. Nice work! Well worth that wait

Excellent

Like many others, I've been anxiously waiting for this next chapter. I love how all of the story lines are beginning to converge a bit. Parts of Chapter 2 were very hard to follow. This was a huge release (pun intended). You do have a gift for this and am back on pins and needles in anticipation of the next chapter. You've gotten us hooked.

I will second the previous comment. It would be good if you had an editor or volunteer go through the story before posting. There are a few small things here and there that would be easy to catch and clean up before posting. I'm sure any fan of this story would be willing to help also.

awesome

I thought it was great. I cant wait till some more moral dilemmas start showing up and we see how he reacts.

Unexpected

This was worth the wait but try not to wait to long in between the next chapter.

Simply Excellent

Can't wait for part 4!

Fantastic

I have to give you kudos and thanks, dear author. I immensely enjoy this story. It is incredibly imaginative and well written. This is definitely novel quality, provided to us as a gift. I'm eager for future installments. Thank you for your efforts!

worth the time!!!!

well, having enjoyed parts 1-3, I was eagerly awaiting part 4. But 28 pages??? Yet once I started, I couldn't stop. It was definitely worth the read. What a fun story line and your writing is well-done! Sure...a few errors here and there....However, You have a gift and an imagination. Your descriptions draw a person in. Keep it up. Looking forward to the next part...

fucking fuckity fuck

Have you ever noticed how often you use the word "fuck"? I saw things described as fucking adjective. Even Hwan said fuck, I believe, which threw me off since he is a foreign man, gone from our planet 15 or 30 years. It's your story, Tristan ' s tale to tell, and maybe just the audience you are shooting for but it appears that you use word fuck a bit much.

delightful and attention sucking

While reading, I felt like a junkie needing his next cigarette or fix. Now that I have read through the entire fourth part, I crave more. Very well done. Great story and a variety of characters that actually seem different and distinct. Thomas is my favorite, followed by Alice (Tristan should have sex and lots of it for her sake with her and maybe Kiari). Which brings up a small point- Regardless of this being an erotica site, we are okay if this is non- erotica or the character just does not have much sex, though part 1 started off very much erotica and Shae seems a tad fixated on sex. If are replying to these, roughly how is old do you picture Jade?

Maybe recaps of chapters

With the time span in between chapters and the depth of development in each chapter, I needed to re-read the entire series before this chapter. Not a horrible thing by any means but maybe other might prefer a recap at the start of new chapters or publish "chapter 1TL;DR" as a separate review of chapter 1. Ps- this story is great. I would pay for the ebook version.

It's nice, but took a rather long time to arrive.

Hey there. I'm glad that you find the time to post content that actually exceeds most standards and is better than just a quick "suck, fuck, end of story" kind of narrative. Thanks for all that you've wrote so far - loving the story. However, (this is the but part), it seems that there's a long period between parts posted. I know that this would shatter the concept of having an uninterrupted time to just read, but I kinda got tired of waiting a few months between parts. But still, 28 pages?! That sort of makes up for the delay. Random question: how long do you plan the whole thing to be?

Wishing you the best,
Anonymous Person

The only thing I didn't like about finishing this story...

...was knowing that when I finished, I would have to wait with baited breath to read the next installment. @IncomingPornDuck please hurry back! And, if its not too much trouble, feel free to leave us occasional updates as to when to be checking in for the next part! Well written, good sir. Fantastico.

yeah!!

finally!!

good chapter :)
derrik not really fucking Jade was good thinking.. otherwise it would have looked bad.

if it was up to me, this story would have to end in rinzai killing shae or at least tristan doing the deed, i am taking no less if the the image you have created of the butterfly woman doesn't change drastically.

and upadate as soon as you can, things just started to get interesting.

cheers

down right cool

This is a terrific story thanks an keep up the good work

What a wonderful imagination!!

Although at times, I feel lost, I also believe that you have made Tristan give me that awareness. Thank you and please continue. Just love the anticipation.

wow

I was starting to wonder if you'd gotten bored of this story... and then THIS! 28 pages of awesome! Thank you, and can't wait to read more!

WOW!!!!

I know it's already been said, but 28 pages of AWESOME!!! Hope you're able to post more soon

WOW!!!

All I want to do now is to go into a coma and await when the next chapter would be out, Excellent Job...

Fantastic

Absolutely fantastic! !!!
More than worth the wait :)
Loved the fact that you produced such a long section. Quite right to keep it all together rather than release it in little bits. .
Can't wait for the next chapter ... :)

Dieing!!!

Damn good so far...
The waiting is starting to kill moi tho'... Can you just lyk tell us approximately when we should be expecting ch.5?... Once again... You awesome!!!

update ????

any update on the next part ?????

Awesome

Great story, cant stop reading it, anxiously waiting for the next chapter

check his bio

It says not to expect the next part for a while. Literotica.com needs a notification email for when your favorite authors publish

Awesome!

Such a great story!! I really enjoy authors who make a real story with feeling and development. I couldn't stop reading! Can't wait until the next chapter is here! Please don't keep us waiting too long.😁

This is the best ever.

You are a master storyteller. Everything about Tristan's Tale is perfection. As for following others' advice about hurrying the next part, please take as much time as you need to avoid sacrificing the quality, this is just too good to rush. That said, I can't wait for more. BRAVO!!

Could be a movie

This was captivating. I'd prefer more sex, buy the story is compelling. I'm looking forward to the next installment.

Great read!!!!

Wonderful writing and very addictive reading.

Incredible

I haven't left a comment for any of the stories I have read here.
But doing so for this will be a crime and I can't live with it.
Awesome stuff bro.

Take ur time for the next one. I wouldnt even mind if there was no sex in it if it is crafted this brilliant, keep up the good work bro.

Glorious.

Glorious. I love it. You have tapped into some powerful stuff. Please continue at whatever pace suits the story. I Iong for more.

Awesome

Please keep this story alive, I would hate to be left hanging, but don't rush

Amazing

Whatever it takes this story deserves an epic ending... no matter how far in the future that might be. It reads like you are having fun with your writing. It shows in the story and in the characters, and your sense of humor and drama (cliff hanging endings) makes this an awesome read and one on the top 3 stories I've ever read on this site. Congrats

Captivating story

Fantastic stuff. I find myself completely engrossed in the world you are creating. Keep it coming please.

This story is amazing I read all 4 parts today and i cant wait for the fifth. This is literally a good story by itself not to mention the sex

Next chapter please lol

Keep them coming!

I am really enjoying this series!! Please not another 4 months for the next chapter :)

Loving the story. Don't want it to end.

Amazing stuff

Love the story. Keep it coming. How come you are not published yet?

Wish I could run out and buy this

This story is intoxicating, I wish I could rush out and buy the book right now. My career is in literacy and I spend a large portion of my time having to correct grammar, syntax, and general ignorance over the use of the English language. Your style of writing is perfect, it's really refreshing to be able to settle into the content rather than being distracted by mistakes leaping off the page. My only negative on this story is that one day it will end - I will sorely miss the characters, I feel like I know them so well. A credit to your talent. Please don't leave us waiting too long for the next installment.

a dagger through the heart

I see that you've updated your page to reveal you're a long, long way off from chapter 5 "if at all". I understand life gets in the way sometimes, but i truly hope you're able to finish this story. As i commented after the previous chapter, this tale is among the very best on this site. After reading chapter four, i would go so far as to say it is the best unfinished work on the site. I eagerly await the next chapter.