Thank you so much, that first one was hard to take. I get it if people want longer stories, but I had a note about the length of the story and people didn't have to read. I appreciate the kind words.
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Anonymous08/24/15
"This is a quickie! Meaning, it's short and to the point."
Well, you're half right. It is short, but it's NOT to the point -- and it could have been with only one or two lines. It falls short on two, well, points: why they are sharing a room and Dad.
Obviously, this is not the first time Allison and Mom had shared a guy. It could have been so easy to add a line about Dad being the guy. For example, when Allison tells Mom that his cock is amazing, adding something along the lines of "Just like Dad's" would have sufficed. Yeah, it could have been the cliched of him being larger than Dad or Dad being ignorant, but that would have been too involved and greatly contrary to your Quickie concept. For someone to be that stupid he would realize what happen having his son and daughter share a room/apartment is a pretty big plot hole.
As for sharing the room/apartment, even something about it being originally hers would sufficed. Otherwise, what, the house has only one bedroom? His has been coimpletely changed since he moved out?
Your setup was a MacGuffin, as was Mom knowing what was going to happen, but even MacGuffins need some closure. THAT would have been to the point.
Don't pay attention to every comment it was fine just a little short for me nockem up.It's the code of the west!
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Anonymous08/27/15
To Many_Memories
Were you born retarded or is the result of huffing airolsol products. Look at your post. Does it make any sense? I'm guessing that you just like to see your "name" in print.
Good job Agnol.
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Anonymous08/27/15
Dumb.....
..........as fuck. Retarded characters. 'nuff said
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Anonymous09/09/15
went too far in the end.
went too far with mom n sister kissing njoying each other.
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Anonymous01/04/17
Okay
At least you kept this one on track and in the appropriate category.
The old fart
English
Fun
Everyone needs a quickie now and then. It does have some possibilities for more in-depth stories.
WATCH OUT!!!!
If you even BREATHE on my "HEAD" I will blow your face into next week with this shot!
Don't get the negative comments, at all...
I loved this story - quickie - yes, but it was a good story.
Thank you Monagamous_Now!
Thank you so much, that first one was hard to take. I get it if people want longer stories, but I had a note about the length of the story and people didn't have to read. I appreciate the kind words.
"This is a quickie! Meaning, it's short and to the point."
Well, you're half right. It is short, but it's NOT to the point -- and it could have been with only one or two lines. It falls short on two, well, points: why they are sharing a room and Dad.
Obviously, this is not the first time Allison and Mom had shared a guy. It could have been so easy to add a line about Dad being the guy. For example, when Allison tells Mom that his cock is amazing, adding something along the lines of "Just like Dad's" would have sufficed. Yeah, it could have been the cliched of him being larger than Dad or Dad being ignorant, but that would have been too involved and greatly contrary to your Quickie concept. For someone to be that stupid he would realize what happen having his son and daughter share a room/apartment is a pretty big plot hole.
As for sharing the room/apartment, even something about it being originally hers would sufficed. Otherwise, what, the house has only one bedroom? His has been coimpletely changed since he moved out?
Your setup was a MacGuffin, as was Mom knowing what was going to happen, but even MacGuffins need some closure. THAT would have been to the point.
It was fine
Don't pay attention to every comment it was fine just a little short for me nockem up.It's the code of the west!
To Many_Memories
Were you born retarded or is the result of huffing airolsol products. Look at your post. Does it make any sense? I'm guessing that you just like to see your "name" in print.
Good job Agnol.
Dumb.....
..........as fuck. Retarded characters. 'nuff said
went too far in the end.
went too far with mom n sister kissing njoying each other.
Okay
At least you kept this one on track and in the appropriate category.
The old fart
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