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Open letter to all readers, and potential critics
for those wanting to offer belabored advice on how to compose gripping erotica - try it yourself (insert expletive of choice)
hard to scroll and type with just one hand, isn't it?
nicely paced - probably don't need much longer to reach the goal - but Evie an Karli might soon realize how careful they need to be of what they wish for - and we'll be here to enjoy their initial discomfort and gradual accommodation of the enormity of the task they've assigned themselves - you know, daddy's deliciously monstrous cock and litres of nourishing and complexion healing spluge
They probably think that...
If you're going to be critical and mean (yes, mean), you should at least Have the stones to write your review while logged in and not hide behind the Anonymous option.
Sorry, Biscuit Hammer, can't log in for review, I'm a girl and you get harassing messages if you dare to disagree with me on here. But my two cents is that I'm living the build-up, especially Evie's private moments with her dad, like in the change room. I really enjoyed that. Him getting all proud and boosting was a nice touch to, it made me giggle.
I'm gonna go out on a limb and say Part 4 Well be the culmination at this rate. Looking forward to it.
-C
Enjoying the build up but...
While I'm enjoying the buildup, the story seems to be more of a lesbian story with a teasing daddy component than an incest story. Both are good and I can see why this series is in this section, I just hope it crosses into the truly "taboo" soon.
Top shelf stuff!
First off...BiscuitHammer....whoever you are, good shit! The grammar could use a bit of editing but the plot build up is right where it needs to be. Fuck all these haters who want you to get to the punchline. I never will understand why people read erotica if all they want is a few expletives and archetypes to pound off to. If that's what you're looking for go on some video site and type 'gonzo' in the search bar. The story is the whole point here. If you don't have the patience to read the story than perhaps erotic literature is not for you. Quit ruining it for the rest of us.
Smokin hot!
Can't wait to read more from you! I love the lesbian tease and daddy trying his best to remain stoic throughout. Cant wait till they take turns on his big cock!
Impressed
Really impressed that you actually took 3 chapters for the girls to seduce him and that there was an actual seduction beyond a flashing and alcohol!
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