Yes you certainly write a wonderfully sexy story.
Just keep up the good work.
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Anonymous08/29/15
woah !
now that is a waterpark ! i wonder if there IS such a waterpark and where it is located because i sure would like to go ther and to join? sounds simply wonderful !
I have read a number of your stories and I have enjoyed them all.
My only criticism of this, as it has been of others, is that it is just too short. You build up the tension, you get to the nitty gritty of the story and then................. it's all over and finished.
Please would write more on your stories. I like short stories, but I think you do yourself a disservice by not writing anything more than 2 or 3 pages.
Please, give it a try and write a longer story, or take one of your earlier ones and add another chapter. Any number of comments on your previous stories have said something similar, we can't all be wrong, can we ?
I do hope you will !
The mayor was all for it--Tiffany just added the (whipped) cream to the dessert. The townspeople will now have another recreational outlet, and everyone will be happy (and rich).
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Loved it
The absurdity of the situation combined with the exhibitionism and the sybian was great.
Wow........
A lot of potential....
Brilliant
Another one of your great stories. Thank You.
Wow so sexy
Yes you certainly write a wonderfully sexy story.
Just keep up the good work.
woah !
now that is a waterpark ! i wonder if there IS such a waterpark and where it is located because i sure would like to go ther and to join? sounds simply wonderful !
A trifle unlikely, but very well written, and a really exciting end.
WOW
Congratulations. Fantastic Story. Well Done. Unrealistic at the end but it is a fantasy, isn't it.?
WOW!!
Stunning work. More please!!
Wonderful !
I have read a number of your stories and I have enjoyed them all.
My only criticism of this, as it has been of others, is that it is just too short. You build up the tension, you get to the nitty gritty of the story and then................. it's all over and finished.
Please would write more on your stories. I like short stories, but I think you do yourself a disservice by not writing anything more than 2 or 3 pages.
Please, give it a try and write a longer story, or take one of your earlier ones and add another chapter. Any number of comments on your previous stories have said something similar, we can't all be wrong, can we ?
I do hope you will !
You can't beat city hall
The mayor was all for it--Tiffany just added the (whipped) cream to the dessert. The townspeople will now have another recreational outlet, and everyone will be happy (and rich).
Great story!
WOW WOW WOW
What a great little story, well done and thank you.
Intriguing and sexy
A unique plot and a good twist. Also, very sexy.
Far fetched story but great!
What an imagination, amazing- I loved it.
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