by CaringAndDemanding
Best story I 've read in weeks on this site. Thank you. Hope to read more from you.
Most of the story hasn't changed, and the story's spelling and grammar were at a good standard before my rewrite, but I still felt it was needed. It was my first novel after all, and there were issues with my storycraft.
Most changes are in the pivotal third chapter and in the subsequent chapters 4 and 5. I'd recommend waiting for the rewrites to be posted. Otherwise you might be confused.
CaringAndDemanding
... You didn't change the name of the story or characters as this is clearly very different from the original. It's hard to separate the two. And I really hope you don't introduce another woman like the original.
When he had Cristina over, did he regress to a more cruel version of himself by being reminded of what she taught him? I hope he can strike a medium that is enough to satisfy Ruth but not injure her.