by DorKnight
Don't switch from third person to first person mid chapter. Fix it and it might be readable.
I hadn't noticed. Too caught up in a good story for it to derail me.
Even with the 3rd to 1st person change, this has become one of my favorite stories. Keep up the great work.
It's'chaise longue' not 'chaise lounge'. It's French.
Other than that, I stopped reading as soon as it became anal. Personal preference. Sorry.
I also missed the perspective change.Section was to hot for me to care I guess
Very well done, this style of futa is very rare for some reason. This needs to be more than a couple chapters, series material for sure. Keep up the great work.