GREAT story! And yes, here comes the BUT.... Always, always, always go back and 1. read for sentence structure, punctuation, proper quotes in dialog, and misspellings first, then 2. read for clarity and continuity. Because once it's out there, it's out there. It saves beating yourself up later. But I liked it a lot. Original. Good perspective. And lot's of juice behind it.
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Anonymous08/31/15
We Love Female Erotic Fiction Writers
Upfront...there are some magnificent men who write erotic fiction, but we personally prefer stories written by a woman in the story or from the view of a woman in the story. This story, if written by Kevin, would have died at the starting gate. Looking forward to more.
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you go girl
Thank you for writing this story... I enjoyed living through your eyes..............
Devil's in the Details
GREAT story! And yes, here comes the BUT.... Always, always, always go back and 1. read for sentence structure, punctuation, proper quotes in dialog, and misspellings first, then 2. read for clarity and continuity. Because once it's out there, it's out there. It saves beating yourself up later. But I liked it a lot. Original. Good perspective. And lot's of juice behind it.
We Love Female Erotic Fiction Writers
Upfront...there are some magnificent men who write erotic fiction, but we personally prefer stories written by a woman in the story or from the view of a woman in the story. This story, if written by Kevin, would have died at the starting gate. Looking forward to more.
more please
what is it today, i like a story, get hot and start leaking and the damned story ends. woe is me LOL
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