All Comments on 'The Challenge'

Very well written. None of the endless background with very little the sex we want

read. Keep it up.

That was very hot. I loved the fact that it was written from a womans perspective and is a fantasy that so many of us have.

Thanks for your feedback. This is my first submission and it took a bit of courage to post. This story is not entirely fictional and I'm thinking of adding a part 2... I welcome all constructive feedback!

Interesting. I think Sean’s response to her teasing was spot on. I think I would have added a line at the end with Sean’s chuckle saying, “I don’t think so. Tomorrow dress more office appropriate, but don’t wear any panties. Be prepared to spend the lunch hour in this office.” Then added … to be continued.

Then you could write a second chapter as they work themselves into an office relationship. The way he turned the tables on her it could become a sub/Dom story. Of course, you could always do a second chapter either way, with my comment or one of your own at the beginning and take the story anyway you wish it to go.

Maddie

Thanks for your input! I have been toying with ideas for a Part 2. I appreciate your insight, Maddie... Stay tuned!