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Hot
I just can't wait for the need chapter!
Great story!
So awesome!!!
C'mon
Almost busted, then it ended, total sadness.
AWESOME!
Please write more!
MORE....
hot story... really really good. please write another chapter.
great story
Would like to say that is a great story for the fisrts chapter
VERY HOT
ICAME TWICE WHILE READING THIS STORY CANT WAIT FOR MORE
Awaiting the next chapter,.,,,!!!!
beautifully written story... so incredibly arousing! I can't wait until the next chapter is posted....
Can I Be Ur Little Girl Daddy
Made me feel exactly like the little girl. I too was wet and wanted daddys cock. By the end of the chapter I was so full of desire I went out to find my daddy too. I met him here online and he became my daddy instantly. We met and I sucked daddy because the author Andrew made me want to. Chapter 2 maybe I will *uck...
About one of the best online
Thank you for showing the innocents of young girl but maturaty. Thank you showing the loving father .. but yet a caring lover! About one of the best I have read here! THANK YOU!
What a delicious start...
to what may become a really great story...
Absolutely Fantastic ...
One of the best reads I think had privilage of reading in a good long while. Do hope you post more!!
~ Lady Kitten.
what the hell
I was looking up lyrics to know the title of the song when this came up. Who wrote this? A 50 year old? No 18 year old acts like that. She sounds 13.
Should you tell us about it...?
No.
I love it!!!
Makes me want to play with my girls!!
FFS
And yet another dreadful little attempt at writing a story. Who knew it's impossible to address one's father without having to address him as daddy in every. fucking. sentence. Clearly, your only goal in this complete shit story is to just type daddy as many times as it's possible for you to do.
Damn, someone woke up in a pissy mood, lol. I didn't really notice 'daddy' being over used. ...I did note a few other things such as the need for contractions when they're talking. Read the stuff out loud and it becomes obvious. Another thing the author does that I noticed in a different chapter is improperly stretching words...(usually during sex;) 'oh fuckkkkk' instead of 'fuuuuuck' ...lots like that, again read it out loud and it solves itself!l
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