Fun story and now your at the fork in the road.....
You got a few options now on how to wrap this up.
1: He can be okay with the guy fucking his wife after he has helped the guy out, giving him a place to live and a place to work. I don't see this as being a good option. Both because cuckold is not my thing and because it makes your hero pretty worthless demoted to the spot of voyeur.
2: He can cut a deal with the guy for pussy still you would have the whole betrayal thing hanging over his head. How are you going to make people respect your hero if he does not get back at the guy for betraying him not to mention the wife?
3: You can have him divorce them and ruin them. But then what kind of sex story is that? You will satisfy your readers that the main guy is actually a man and worth cheering for but then you don't really have a decent story.
My recommendation is that you keep it all in mind. The guy has to suffer in some way for his betrayal. The wife has to suffer in someway for her betrayal and become faithful again. And your main character has to seem like someone we can cheer for. Good luck.
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Anonymous09/11/15
Editing please
You put together a bunch of short choppy sentences and it's really distracting from the flow of the story. I had a hard time following it to be honest. I am scoring it a two because of that, however your story and concept have potential but you really need editing help.
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Anonymous09/11/15
NONE OF IT MAKES SENSE
STORY IS SO STUPID,FOR 1ST TIME EVER I HAVE TO SHOUT. CAN'T BELIEVE WASTED TIME READING IT
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Anonymous09/12/15
Interesting idea
Wish they were all younger though, that way she could get pregnant and lie to her husband its his when he knows the truth.
English
Fun story and now your at the fork in the road.....
You got a few options now on how to wrap this up.
1: He can be okay with the guy fucking his wife after he has helped the guy out, giving him a place to live and a place to work. I don't see this as being a good option. Both because cuckold is not my thing and because it makes your hero pretty worthless demoted to the spot of voyeur.
2: He can cut a deal with the guy for pussy still you would have the whole betrayal thing hanging over his head. How are you going to make people respect your hero if he does not get back at the guy for betraying him not to mention the wife?
3: You can have him divorce them and ruin them. But then what kind of sex story is that? You will satisfy your readers that the main guy is actually a man and worth cheering for but then you don't really have a decent story.
My recommendation is that you keep it all in mind. The guy has to suffer in some way for his betrayal. The wife has to suffer in someway for her betrayal and become faithful again. And your main character has to seem like someone we can cheer for. Good luck.
Editing please
You put together a bunch of short choppy sentences and it's really distracting from the flow of the story. I had a hard time following it to be honest. I am scoring it a two because of that, however your story and concept have potential but you really need editing help.
NONE OF IT MAKES SENSE
STORY IS SO STUPID,FOR 1ST TIME EVER I HAVE TO SHOUT. CAN'T BELIEVE WASTED TIME READING IT
Interesting idea
Wish they were all younger though, that way she could get pregnant and lie to her husband its his when he knows the truth.
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