I Will Never Be Loved Ch. 04

Enjoying this!

Wish you would make the chapters longer though!

waiting

You just cant leave me hanging like this. The story is very good so just keep them coming

story line is great

but you need to move it along a little. The story is just a little bogged down, either speed it up or provide a little more detail about what is going on around them. longer chapters might help as well. Do not get discouraged, we all want the story to continue.

Combine chapters

You really need to combine and post 2 chapters at a time or you will frustrate the readers here. I would strongly recommend that your next posting be 'I Will Never Be Loved Ch. 05 - 06'

Also you should consider posting a link to the other site story on your profile page here.

Good job.

I'm loving this story right now. keep writing just make the chapters longer.

Love it!!!

Too short.

Good story

Three stars. Chapters are way too short. It makes it seem as if its so drawn out. You will lose readers this way.

Danielle need to take some of those bricks down from that wall. It's nothing wrong with her being cautious but the rude way she is behaving is not going to accomplish anything.

Edits

Saw a couple of typos but great story so far. Needs to be a touch longer but like the set up here
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Appealing

Ok, Storyteller, I like your story. I may be able to help you with editing. I have several writers' works in process now but I would be happy to look at your future chapters or other stories. If you wish, you may contact me via the Volunteer Editors List.

Loving it

and I SSSSOOOOOOO like where this story is going.... keep writing and positing