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by Anonymous09/11/15

Get a dictionary!

It 's not 'rod iron'. Try 'wrought iron'

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by Anonymous09/14/15

get another dictionary

Seems you have a story about losing your virginity to share but you're too excited to tell it correctly.
"He scratched at the straps of facial hair that went down to his goatee "
You'll have to explain this one.
Straps of hair? Makes no sense.
if there's hair attaching the goatee, it's not a goatee.
"She raised her legs up high, closing them like she knew Joseph liked."
This is another one. You've already established this was their first meeting. Remember? "Pleased to finally meet you."
I've read better stories of people losing their virginity. This on is simply piss-poor.

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by Anonymous09/20/15

Jerks

Oh goodness. Pointing out small errors gets my dick so hard!

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