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Nice story but full of typographical errors. Need to have someone edit the story.
Where the fuck those quotation mark?
I just couldn't keep reading after first few lines.
No worries - you got your point across, Fadedcap.
Yup - lots of typos. You were probably too busy coming up with this clever and sexy story to worry too much about that stuff. Good characters and storyline (especially the raft part) - that's what matters. Find yourself a cute editor to clean it up, if you like - or just keep writing, which is the important part, right? A lot of people can edit but not all of them have your imagination.
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