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Halls of Residence Ch. 01

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by Anonymous09/11/15

Rushed

It could be good but you need an editor as it's difficult to work out which girl was undressing who.

The climax also came to soon. You need to draw it out more.

Keep trying as there is potential.

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by Anonymous09/14/15

To rushed

you can clearly tell its a series thing, do you not think they are going to write more?...

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