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It was a very odd story and hard to keep up with.
2*s
That was the most boring page 1 . But I have decided to finish a story I start.
The rest of the story didn't work. Characters that are cliche. A complete lack of emotional connection with the reader.
Gave you 2*s, because I don't have any feelings for it. Except for that boring 1st page, that was difficult to slog through,lol.
AMerryman
It's***
A read.
Name
Marcie, Marci,Marcia first paragraph ?????
An Odd One
A odd story which seems to work and the husband Jeff has mild Bull tendencies about him !
Might be sequal here for the making !
How In Hell
does a TexasFarmBoy think up crap like this?
Apparently,
there's a lot of free time on Texas farms theses days.
brother and sister or husband and wife?
which is it?
Please read my whole story before you comment.why?
We knew you were a little cum sucking fag author ,after only 3paragraphs.
Interesting take
Switch and switch back, cleverly crafted! Not entirely my cup of tea but I do appreciate the effort in writing this tale. Keep up the good work.
Compressed time line forced artificial and sketchy scenes but there were greater amount of platinum ones
My measure for a no doubt five star story is three great scenes , no weak ones. Well this tale had some clunkers. But the gems like the dialogue with wariness cc party vultures and the bartender tete-a-tete were WONDERFUL. The characters didn't stay static and stayed credible, albeit with a few leaps of faith needed on reader's part. . Loved that. I'm a softy for happy endings and business subplots spicing boudoir action as well.
Ergo full marks. *****
Fag author
Fuck off
Husband and wife seemed happy
It seems weird for husband to watch seduction attempt and then seduce someone else. If Peter is so good at seduction then it could turn into a mess. Cheating came to easy which means it could happen again.
Uk....???
WTF!????!!!!??????
If !!!
If only !!!
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