A slice of life--or lives. Several lives are involved. But just not enough connective tissue to make clear how each person is involved with the others. So that the short story seems almost surreal. Mostly it is descriptive of what he witnesses or imagines about the hooker and others. And an undercurrent of how he feels about her. Resentment. Lust. Maybe infatuation or love. But not enough to clarify anything much. Of who these people are. What they mean to each other. How they truly feel. And whether we care....Still this slice was intriguing and different. I give it a 5.
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Anonymous09/17/15
Tangled up in blue
Very nicely done with a Raymond Chandler, noir vibe. The storyline is reminiscent of Dylan's "Tangled Up in Blue" with its hints of other lives, other plotlines.
Not particularly pornographic, so many might be disappointed but the story is beautifully crafted and well-written.
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Anonymous09/20/15
Hard Times
Keep writing. this is far from finished.
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Anonymous09/26/15
This is the goods. Simple as that. I want my erotica hardboiled. Got another hundred pages?
English
Surreal vignette?
A slice of life--or lives. Several lives are involved. But just not enough connective tissue to make clear how each person is involved with the others. So that the short story seems almost surreal. Mostly it is descriptive of what he witnesses or imagines about the hooker and others. And an undercurrent of how he feels about her. Resentment. Lust. Maybe infatuation or love. But not enough to clarify anything much. Of who these people are. What they mean to each other. How they truly feel. And whether we care....Still this slice was intriguing and different. I give it a 5.
Tangled up in blue
Very nicely done with a Raymond Chandler, noir vibe. The storyline is reminiscent of Dylan's "Tangled Up in Blue" with its hints of other lives, other plotlines.
Not particularly pornographic, so many might be disappointed but the story is beautifully crafted and well-written.
Hard Times
Keep writing. this is far from finished.
This is the goods. Simple as that. I want my erotica hardboiled. Got another hundred pages?
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