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by Rybka12/10/03

Ray would like it

Nicely done and an interesting approach to the generational differences. - I like it.

One thing: "Passionate lips? embraces" does not sound right to me.

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by annaswirls12/11/03

study hall?

As a former teacher of such creatures, I imagined you writing this while monitering study hall or lunch duty....you have a great perspective on the generation-- thanks for sharing-- I got a kick out of it!

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by Angeline12/11/03

This just flows

beautifully and yes you have that rat-a-tat onomatopoeia working along with all the other devices. I love poems layered with references and multiple meanings like this one--you can keep rereading it, finding new ideas to contemplate. :)

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