All Comments on 'Streak of Grey Pt. 01'

Some questions: 1st - he was a bus driver, but have $ 400,00 to give her a gold necklace? 2nd - He and his friends had all those muslim rules, but engaged in bacchanalia with their wives and friends? What about the women decorum Islam demands? 3rd - Indian and Pakistani, hate each other, no way her husband would go for this, even if he wanted an open marriage...so a plot nor well developed...1*

Bet he is suck cum out of her in days. Keep writing, gave you a 5 for your effort. Fuck you dear annony you ass hole licker

Cucks and sluts, how original.

I’m giving you a 5 on this one. Yes, there are a few grammar mistakes, but nothing that can’t be attributed to the difference in countries. I see you have a long list of stories. Since you are no novice, you may want to conform more to American standards, since you are publishing in US. (Or not)

Now for the things I really liked. First and foremost, you developed the relationship over a period of time. It developed slowly, just as it would in real life. As it develops, we see the woman getting in deeper and deeper, while the husband encourages her because he has his own reasons. Mainly his getting a kick out of hearing about the wife’s experiences, but almost as important is his lust for his fellow worker.

Keep writing the next chapter and don’t worry about the naysayers. If by some chance one of them was to refer you to one of their stories as an example of how to do it, pay close attention.

BTW the Muslim men talk a very high moral life when in their home country. Friends who have been with them in western society say they are REAL party animals.

Why can we proof our work several times and still submit "chazter" for chapter? Sorry bout that. Dreamer

Well, Damn it, you know what I mean! I've had a hard day. Dreamer

Waiting for next parts.

A very nice erotic beginning of a story. Please post the next part soon.

I am very curious as to how you plan to extend this story. Can we have the next part soon please...

This story is written by not the man named Prateek instead by some muslim fellow who has fantasy of seducing hindu woman

Very nice storyline though in somewhat stilted English. Looking forward to future developments.

Please publish the next part asap.

i love the seduction. excellent, publish more.

Buddy... Next ???

Does Ali get her.. Does he get her pregnant? or make her a slut. Interesting plot love to read more

The Pakistani wife is a keeper. Women are smarter than men & can manipulate men. She certainly has sensed her husband's voyeur tendences & feels she can play him if she pushes the right buttons.

Her husband is an asshole, totally dishonest, manipulative to the power of three. He has a sinister hidden agenda.

His wife is more honest. Essentially she obtained a tacit or explicit approval from her husband for whatever she had done. Her agenda can be extrapolated from her words. If i were her husband i would say she plays with open cards. If i were her brother i would say her husbands has stacked the deck.

The Pakistani wife is a true Loving Wife. I would marry her!

Great story. Kindly publish the next part.

Came across this wonderful story written from a mature perspective. When can we expect the next part?

Story by a pigshit paki. Enough said.

he lives in shit and eats shit and drinks shit, and his wife told me he smells like shit! Gave this a 5

Hi i have read almost all ur stories but commenting for the first time. Infact i never commented in any of the stories i read. Coming back to ur stories they were amazing. Many complained about the slow narration but thats where ur stories stood out from the rest. Very enjoyable and stayed horny for hours reading those stories ;) But please complete the stories. Its no fun when the climax is not known. Please complete this story and Exciting Adventurous

Experiences Ch. 5..

Good writing post the remaining part soon

Post the entire story dude you left us thirsty for more

You have described a straightforward story into a very erotic manner. Great job.