Cheating 101

Ehh

Pretty good for a first timer. My first thought at the title was, jesus, chapter 101! That must approach some kind of record on the site. But of course you meant elementary, as in beginning. I liked the intro, very vernacular monologue, but the narrator never seemed real. Hard to read a story without real dialog, and there was no sense of passion or excitement. The woman was a stick figure the whole time. Of course when we find out it was role play, well that explains it.

So on with the next story, and work on conveying excitement.
Chilley