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by Ashesh909/20/15

DISRESPECT HAS TO BE URNED

Pl explain Tazz what is meant by above ? Do you imply first burn disrespect & then put the ashes in an urn ???!

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by erectus12309/25/15

strong

first line - well done

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by wakingDown09/25/15

I like the fall of your hammer:

Flat and heavy impacts in the declarations, letting the ring of the strike be formed however it will in the mind of each person reading. It feels vicious without being personal, aggressive without having a target in mind; a straight-line drive with dismissive, unheeding disregard for whoever or whatever may get caught up in the implications. This is the kind of stuff I like, tazz. It really reaches out and touches someone, whether they want it to or not. I have to agree, that first line is great. A lean and mean, cannibal-toothed killer; and it turned my usual grimace to a grin. Good job on it, I needed a smile like that this morning.

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by HoneyAdored09/26/15

This is a killer...

...of a poem.

I 'bet' what I see, is all in my head…so many multiple meanings
Pt1... a person that disrespect deserves death or disrespect itself, has to be stopped or we need to heed, that our behaviour can cause us to be disrespected.
Pt2... We all have to pay our dues on 'judgement day', left me wondering where his soul will end up, and the funeral toll had me hearing the bells slowly rung.
Pt3…Turn in their grave, burn in a furnace, burn in hell, crash and burn, lost, bad choices...
Pt5…Saving the 6 their final sojourn - 6ft under, temporary resting till…(insert depending on beliefs)
And to top it all, I see a crap game going on, paying our debts, turn of the dice, turn of luck, turn the tables, burn at the table, roll of the dice, wishing a 6. Has this person, gambled their life way?

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by LacyLove10/08/16

Very well written!

xoxo
Lacy

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