All Comments on 'Perilous Waters - A Ballad'

by legerdemer

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AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
a few suggestions

Will you allay my sorrows? is your best line, melodic and significant -- use it in a repeating chorus

rhyme the last word of the stanza as it provides continuity and fluidity to a song, by not doing so you block the songs integrity and separate the parts from the whole

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