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by Anonymous09/23/15

Too Short

Thanks for contributing, but this is WAY too short. There is NO payoff here for the reader, even if you're planning on updating this every day.

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by Anonymous09/24/15

Not bad

Not a bad start, but this reads a bit like a Wattpad story, and you should be aware that chapter lengths are expected to be considerably longer on Lit than on Watt. If I am right and this story is already up on Watt, my recommendation to you is to combine the chapters when you post here. For example, your next post could be ABDC Ch. 02-04 (yes I put three chapters in there since your chapters are rather short). Figure you want to post a minimum of 8k words on Lit at a time, or your votes will go down the tubes even if the story's pretty good. Also you should probably delete that one comment that has nothing to do with the story.

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