Will Be Yours Ch. 18

Oh the drama!

I love drama and the real life edge to this. Keep going, it's great.

Cliffhanger

Wen't through all instalments in one continuous sitting. Absolutely brilliant so far. Yup, drama and buildup of the best kind. Hope it is'nt too long before the next instalment.
Sam seems to be a harbinger of bad things so far. Wonder where that's going.

Mother

So, far I like the story with only (1) dislike. Cynthia is not married to Luke. He can not make medical decision regarding her condition. The mother needs to be told. That conversation needs to take place. You keep skating around it.

Over all I like the story

The test . . .

of a piece like this is if you believe the characters are real, and if you care what happens to them. I believe and I care. This is very nicely done.

You are doing a great job handling the give and take of internal emotions.

Heart stirring and amazing!

Like another commenter, I find myself believing your characters are real, and caring deeply about what happens to them. Only a very talented writer can create such an engrossing story. That said, I am glad that this chapter is over and I am hoping for more positive plot turns moving forward. As always, very well done. And, thank you!

Hopeful in California...

Lone Girl,
You are an excellent writer. I also write, so I'm speaking from experience. What a cliff-hanger! Here I was thinking that #18 would be the wrap up of Will Be Yours, but like everyone else I get to wait. You know what they say, "Anything good is worth waiting for." I hope you will reexamine the idea of an intelligent Designer, a heavenly Father that has our best interest at heart. I know, I know: "Why would a so-called loving Father allow so much suffering in the world?" He didn't create it; He allowed it---WE screwed this world up, but it is being redeemed, one situation at a time, and may I say, in part it is being redeemed by stories like yours. YOU have given me hope for mankind, and even though I'm personally going through a rough patch right now, your words help me to believe in love and to hope for healing. God bless you and your writing,
C