Is there a race to see how fast you can finish a story? Why not build on the story and characters? As an example we don't even know who Jordon is. Is it a one time thing? Will her husband find out? It could probably be a decent story If you went into more detail. As it stands now, this is a very bad story.
1. Jordan if you had read the story and not just glanced through it was her lover.........hello read the last line UNTIL OUR NEXT CHANCE ENCOUNTER? And who cares if her husband found out you want to be his witness? Please you are just picking at stupid shit.
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To much of a hurry.
Is there a race to see how fast you can finish a story? Why not build on the story and characters? As an example we don't even know who Jordon is. Is it a one time thing? Will her husband find out? It could probably be a decent story If you went into more detail. As it stands now, this is a very bad story.
This is a great Erotic story
1. Jordan if you had read the story and not just glanced through it was her lover.........hello read the last line UNTIL OUR NEXT CHANCE ENCOUNTER? And who cares if her husband found out you want to be his witness? Please you are just picking at stupid shit.
I like your stories, but
This one seemed rushed no solid background on the characters, and too little details on the actual encounter. Needs another chapter.
LOL
Hey my fingers got wet from dipping in my package
great
you put alot of you into these stories and you can tell
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