I'd love to see this as an unedited movie with a really good cast.
Great story telling. Just finished. Now I'm going to read it again. I was touched. I was intertained. I was stimulated. Thank you for sharing your writing gift.
Wow!! That's an amazing story. Brilliant, exciting, sexy and all
things great. Please keep writing for all of us. You're truly a gifted
writer...Bravo!
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Anonymous10/15/16
That was such a beautiful story! So many emotions and the storyline was just so great!
This is one of my all-time favorite stories on Lit. I've read it several times, now. I'm VERY glad to see you've written more about Ed and the women in his life. I hope to see even more in the future!
Lots of good story - lots of great sex! Really Great! Thanks! It must have been an effort but you have a very pleased audience! Fantastic end to this part BTW! Already added to my favorites, I'll re-read many more times!
Was home sick in bed and this made what was going to be a miserable day a much better one. Yes, there were errors, but that happens. Remember, this is free. That's not an excuse -- but it means that the writing is a labor of love, and any readers and/or editors are volunteers, doing it for free. For me, a few glitches can be easily overlooked if the tale is good, with believable characterizations. This didn't have many issues, and I really liked the story.
The comment by anonymous on 01/07/16 about Ed being autistic is, I think, spot on. The writing conveyed this very well. The best one I've ever come across is Elizabeth Moon's "The Speed of Dark," but this tale did the concept and portrayal justice.
Monster Trucks from Outer Space! What a hoot! Roger Corman, eat your heart out! I even imagined the trailers. Grace's co-workers getting their own mugs was really good, and there were a few other good moments. But the Monster Trucks? Still laughing about it. Pure gold.
For those who say this could almost be a book? Thirty-two pages is about 320 pages, give or take, on a word processor. That's a good-sized novel. Hands down.
Thanks for sharing! Added to Favorites and 5*
by
Anonymous11/21/16
Really enjoyed this story. Very well done and a little t of good fantasy. Thank you so much for doing this. Can hardly wait to read more of your stories! John
by
Anonymous11/24/16
Perfect
THIS STORY WAS SO AMAZING. Being the strong reader I am, I finished this in 2 days and couldn't help but to want to read way more about Grace, Ed, and Heathers life. Please add to this, I would be eternally grateful.
by
Anonymous11/30/16
A little much
Ed is not just a football standout, but he can cure the disabled, rescue predatory rivals from a burning truck, and teach a chef at a prime steakhouse how to season beef. On a day off he solves a complicated engineering problem and lands a huge contract for work. It's all a little much.
by
Anonymous12/07/16
In the spectrum
I was very happy with the story. I enjoyed the character development and how it came to a close. I feel like it was written by a woman with experience with someone in the autism spectrum. These people can be amazing. It was a great harem story.
Thank you.
by
Anonymous12/07/16
The Best By Far
I've liked a lot of stories on this site, but this one outclasses them all; the character development and focus on subjects other than sex really brought it home as a complete story. If I had one complaint, it would be that "too much" happens to Ed at times; being kidnapped and used as a sex slave, kicked out of his house, becoming what is essentially a sous chef, getting into a fight, redesigning an entire building's HVAC, and almost getting shot all within a week is a bit much.
by
Anonymous12/15/16
Outstanding
I'm a very busy person and honestly it took me 2 days to read this story. I must tell you the way you tell the start id's outstanding it kept me coming back between my schedule honestly you should be published if you are not. Great story outstanding!
by
Anonymous12/16/16
wonderful
one of if not the best stories I've read. I hope someday there will be a continuation or another story. Once again a most delightful story thank you!
by
Anonymous12/18/16
Unbelievable!
That was truly an amazing story! I'm not from this site, came here from sexstories.com as someone from there decided to post here instead. I decided to take a look after finishing his story and stumbled upon something that was so captivating I couldn't stop reading it till I finished it!! I did manage to stop long enough to eat and use the restroom, but other than that I didn't want to stop reading. There are only a few stories that have had that affect on me (Nivek_88 from sexstories.com with his "An Incest Birthday" series was one, and a few of Stephen King's novels as well) I will definitely be checking back to see if you write more of this story or any others, which I absolutely hope you do!!! Thank you for your amazing work. :) Sully.
His nervousness and the blushing and every thing killed it for me.
by
Anonymous01/08/17
Great writing
The story is different and refreshing. Only complaint was length. I would have made it two or three installments. Should no more than 10 pages with one great climax and a teaser to get them to go to the next installment.
by
Anonymous01/10/17
lable your story correctly, this is noncon or dubious
I stopped reading despite the good reviews because the nonconsent or dubious consent was a brick wall for me. I implore writers to tag correctly, or comprehensively, so that readers know before they start reading. I was ready to read the 32 page story but the missing tags left me unprepared for Ed's abuse. Your writing is good but the tag stuff is crucial.
by
Anonymous01/28/17
Happy
This has been one of the best stories i have read in a long time.
by
Anonymous01/29/17
A story right at the top of this genre!
Wow! A great story.One of the best I've read on here.
by
Anonymous01/31/17
Wow
When I saw 32 pages, I almost stopped, but I couldn't stop reading. It was an amazing story and I loved every page. Keep up the great work.
by
Anonymous02/01/17
Fabulous
Your story is impressive and to some extent breathtaking. As a non-native English speaker and a writing apprentice, I also found many words showing great diction. Thank you very much!
by
Anonymous02/02/17
Only if it's free
I found the writing suitable for the price, but I wouldn't pay for it.
The page count was a tad intimidating but the story was good. I had so much fun reading this. This was like watching a magnum PI episode on pages. Far fetched but not grossly unbelievable, Ed is a lucky guy. I would definitely read a continuation of this. It would be great to see the other cast of ladies and how things pan out with them.
A really great story. Obviously a fantasy but great. My only issue with the story is your perception of Ed's cock size and the receptivity of a ladies vagina. I get the impression from the text that it is about 10" long and 2" diameter. This is not much bigger that British average. You make a lot of noise about it being overly large to fit in a woman. Mine is that size and the ladies I have had the fortune of having sex with have not had any problem accommodating me, even the two virgins I have had the honour of being with took it in with relative ease once the first discomfort has passed.
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Anonymous02/08/17
Loveconquersall
The story was very long, but necessary due to the extended cast of characters. His boss had to know that the 'servicing' was more than just HVAC, but it IS a story. It would be wonderful if there were more people in the world with hearts as good as Ed's, but his naivety added to that.
As another comment stated, whomever wrote this story absolutely has to follow this up with individual stories about the continuing lives of each of the women in Ed's life. And I disagree with another comment; I would pay for this and future stories because I love 'feel-good' stories - and I'm a guy.
Loved it!!
by
Anonymous02/09/17
Great
Oh my god badass story
by
Anonymous02/10/17
"Not much bigger than the British average!!" Gosh ! This is a ploy to get more women into Britain right?
Good story I liked it
by
Anonymous02/19/17
Too long
And a bit repetitive.
by
Anonymous02/24/17
Excellent!
I do enjoy a long story with a bit more depth to the characters.
Good Job!
This was one incredible story! I can't express enough how wonderful, thoughtful, and excruciating it was to read this story. The excruciating part was for the things Ed had to go through (the mean things) in his life. That had me in tears. The hope that he and Grace would finally be together. I was grateful that the author was sensitive to the different aspects of love and that it was ok to love more than one. It was extremely beautiful and special the way the author handled the love scene with Grace, Ed, and Rachel. It was a perfect ending. Please keep writing, you are amazing!!
by
Anonymous03/04/17
Great storytelling
I loved how u took the nm and guy from begin to ending the first time in a while I have been in a story were the pepper were the people grew together and became better at the end I would love to see another story like this one please
by
Anonymous03/07/17
Its an amazing story and the amount of character
and events in Ed's life, justifies why it took 32 pages.
Great work..
English
I'd love to see this as an unedited movie with a really good cast.
Great story telling. Just finished. Now I'm going to read it again. I was touched. I was intertained. I was stimulated. Thank you for sharing your writing gift.
Wow!
Just wow! Great writing and storyline!
Wow!! That's an amazing story. Brilliant, exciting, sexy and all
things great. Please keep writing for all of us. You're truly a gifted
writer...Bravo!
That was such a beautiful story! So many emotions and the storyline was just so great!
Great Story
This is one of my all-time favorite stories on Lit. I've read it several times, now. I'm VERY glad to see you've written more about Ed and the women in his life. I hope to see even more in the future!
Just incredible!
Lots of good story - lots of great sex! Really Great! Thanks! It must have been an effort but you have a very pleased audience! Fantastic end to this part BTW! Already added to my favorites, I'll re-read many more times!
Happy endings ...
... are my favourite endings. I was enthralled by Ed and Grace's journey. I so look forward to reading the next part.
Thank you from Fanny xx
Out freaking sranding!!!
Very well written, a couple of minor typos. Great story, with a great ending for a great guy! Thank you!!
Amazing Story
Well written. Keeps you in suspense through out the story. Thanks for the great read.
Too disgusted to read past the third page.
EXCELLENT STORY
Very real. Very good effort. I look forward to reading more of your offerings.😉😉
Thanks!
Was home sick in bed and this made what was going to be a miserable day a much better one. Yes, there were errors, but that happens. Remember, this is free. That's not an excuse -- but it means that the writing is a labor of love, and any readers and/or editors are volunteers, doing it for free. For me, a few glitches can be easily overlooked if the tale is good, with believable characterizations. This didn't have many issues, and I really liked the story.
The comment by anonymous on 01/07/16 about Ed being autistic is, I think, spot on. The writing conveyed this very well. The best one I've ever come across is Elizabeth Moon's "The Speed of Dark," but this tale did the concept and portrayal justice.
Monster Trucks from Outer Space! What a hoot! Roger Corman, eat your heart out! I even imagined the trailers. Grace's co-workers getting their own mugs was really good, and there were a few other good moments. But the Monster Trucks? Still laughing about it. Pure gold.
For those who say this could almost be a book? Thirty-two pages is about 320 pages, give or take, on a word processor. That's a good-sized novel. Hands down.
Thanks for sharing! Added to Favorites and 5*
Really enjoyed this story. Very well done and a little t of good fantasy. Thank you so much for doing this. Can hardly wait to read more of your stories! John
Perfect
THIS STORY WAS SO AMAZING. Being the strong reader I am, I finished this in 2 days and couldn't help but to want to read way more about Grace, Ed, and Heathers life. Please add to this, I would be eternally grateful.
A little much
Ed is not just a football standout, but he can cure the disabled, rescue predatory rivals from a burning truck, and teach a chef at a prime steakhouse how to season beef. On a day off he solves a complicated engineering problem and lands a huge contract for work. It's all a little much.
In the spectrum
I was very happy with the story. I enjoyed the character development and how it came to a close. I feel like it was written by a woman with experience with someone in the autism spectrum. These people can be amazing. It was a great harem story.
Thank you.
The Best By Far
I've liked a lot of stories on this site, but this one outclasses them all; the character development and focus on subjects other than sex really brought it home as a complete story. If I had one complaint, it would be that "too much" happens to Ed at times; being kidnapped and used as a sex slave, kicked out of his house, becoming what is essentially a sous chef, getting into a fight, redesigning an entire building's HVAC, and almost getting shot all within a week is a bit much.
Outstanding
I'm a very busy person and honestly it took me 2 days to read this story. I must tell you the way you tell the start id's outstanding it kept me coming back between my schedule honestly you should be published if you are not. Great story outstanding!
wonderful
one of if not the best stories I've read. I hope someday there will be a continuation or another story. Once again a most delightful story thank you!
Unbelievable!
That was truly an amazing story! I'm not from this site, came here from sexstories.com as someone from there decided to post here instead. I decided to take a look after finishing his story and stumbled upon something that was so captivating I couldn't stop reading it till I finished it!! I did manage to stop long enough to eat and use the restroom, but other than that I didn't want to stop reading. There are only a few stories that have had that affect on me (Nivek_88 from sexstories.com with his "An Incest Birthday" series was one, and a few of Stephen King's novels as well) I will definitely be checking back to see if you write more of this story or any others, which I absolutely hope you do!!! Thank you for your amazing work. :) Sully.
1 of 3... 5***
ok all u new guys this is 1 of 3 theirs 2 more books/ after this the second book is The Most Valuable Gift and the third is To Walk a Mile so enjoy
Couldn't enjoy it!
His nervousness and the blushing and every thing killed it for me.
Great writing
The story is different and refreshing. Only complaint was length. I would have made it two or three installments. Should no more than 10 pages with one great climax and a teaser to get them to go to the next installment.
lable your story correctly, this is noncon or dubious
I stopped reading despite the good reviews because the nonconsent or dubious consent was a brick wall for me. I implore writers to tag correctly, or comprehensively, so that readers know before they start reading. I was ready to read the 32 page story but the missing tags left me unprepared for Ed's abuse. Your writing is good but the tag stuff is crucial.
Happy
This has been one of the best stories i have read in a long time.
A story right at the top of this genre!
Wow! A great story.One of the best I've read on here.
Wow
When I saw 32 pages, I almost stopped, but I couldn't stop reading. It was an amazing story and I loved every page. Keep up the great work.
Fabulous
Your story is impressive and to some extent breathtaking. As a non-native English speaker and a writing apprentice, I also found many words showing great diction. Thank you very much!
Only if it's free
I found the writing suitable for the price, but I wouldn't pay for it.
Loved this story!! It was so romantic and sexy!
This is a fun story
The page count was a tad intimidating but the story was good. I had so much fun reading this. This was like watching a magnum PI episode on pages. Far fetched but not grossly unbelievable, Ed is a lucky guy. I would definitely read a continuation of this. It would be great to see the other cast of ladies and how things pan out with them.
From Specky Clarke.
A really great story. Obviously a fantasy but great. My only issue with the story is your perception of Ed's cock size and the receptivity of a ladies vagina. I get the impression from the text that it is about 10" long and 2" diameter. This is not much bigger that British average. You make a lot of noise about it being overly large to fit in a woman. Mine is that size and the ladies I have had the fortune of having sex with have not had any problem accommodating me, even the two virgins I have had the honour of being with took it in with relative ease once the first discomfort has passed.
Loveconquersall
The story was very long, but necessary due to the extended cast of characters. His boss had to know that the 'servicing' was more than just HVAC, but it IS a story. It would be wonderful if there were more people in the world with hearts as good as Ed's, but his naivety added to that.
As another comment stated, whomever wrote this story absolutely has to follow this up with individual stories about the continuing lives of each of the women in Ed's life. And I disagree with another comment; I would pay for this and future stories because I love 'feel-good' stories - and I'm a guy.
Loved it!!
Great
Oh my god badass story
"Not much bigger than the British average!!" Gosh ! This is a ploy to get more women into Britain right?
Good story I liked it
Too long
And a bit repetitive.
Excellent!
I do enjoy a long story with a bit more depth to the characters.
Good Job!
Awesome!!
This was one incredible story! I can't express enough how wonderful, thoughtful, and excruciating it was to read this story. The excruciating part was for the things Ed had to go through (the mean things) in his life. That had me in tears. The hope that he and Grace would finally be together. I was grateful that the author was sensitive to the different aspects of love and that it was ok to love more than one. It was extremely beautiful and special the way the author handled the love scene with Grace, Ed, and Rachel. It was a perfect ending. Please keep writing, you are amazing!!
Great storytelling
I loved how u took the nm and guy from begin to ending the first time in a while I have been in a story were the pepper were the people grew together and became better at the end I would love to see another story like this one please
Its an amazing story and the amount of character
and events in Ed's life, justifies why it took 32 pages.
Great work..
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