This was such a wonderful story! 50 Shades eat your heart out! I actually found my eyes were "tearing up" at the end having seen it come to an end...I think further Adventures of Edward and his Ladies are in order.
My absolute favorite story EVER! Held me captive from Chapter 1 to 32.
What a joy this story was....pulled at all the emotions, and the good guy truly won in the end.
by
Anonymous10/01/15
Deeply moved
As a gentleman reader I was truely captivated by this story. Please write more and share your love in emotions and words. Thank you for sharing such passion.
by
Anonymous10/01/15
Beautifull
Very nicely written good emotions good sex balance
by
Anonymous10/01/15
Excellent
Awesome story! Fantastic plot and story line, not just about the sex, but finding loving relationships out of a chaotic past.
by
Anonymous10/01/15
One of the best stories I ever read!
One of the best stories I ever have read, I can tell as I read them since 1996. Thank you.
by
Anonymous10/02/15
Sequel??
There will, of course, be a follow-on??
by
Anonymous10/02/15
Great story!
Very well written. Long, but detailed and interesting with lots of twists and turns. I really, really enjoyed it. Thanks!
Btw, back on page 20 something you called him Joe. Other than that, great editing.
by
Anonymous10/02/15
Story was great even without the sex.
I loved to read this for the story as well as the sex.. I would really like to find out the rest of the stories that were left. Did the building the judge was working on get torn down things like that.
After working through all the different women's stories when he got together with his cousin it seemed to end quickly. Was there nothing left to write about?
I do want to say that you write really well and it flowed.
by
Anonymous10/03/15
awesome
Great story, great plot! I hope there will be a follow up story that ties up the lose ends and ofc carries on the story of Ed, Grace, Rachel and their friends.
Despite a very few grammtical errors, this was an excellent story. At first I was a bit put off by Ed's Forrest Gump like persona, but the character really does grow on you. The women are all too perfect, but then this site is about fantasies anyway. You've left a lot of possibilities for other story lines and I hope you're going to do the same excellent job with them eventually.
by
Anonymous10/03/15
Mishka and Heather
Please continue Mishka and heathers relationship. I would love to feel the chemestry between them. Also give Lydia a little more attention as I felt she was a very REAL charachter where Angie, Steph and Carolyn were all jumbled and confused and their storys were narrow and were nore story plot fillers than anything Lydia was more real and interesting and I wish she had nore of a purpose.
by
Anonymous10/03/15
Well written story
Outstanding story -- I hope you continue the series. It was 32 pages but an excellent read
by
Anonymous10/04/15
Great story
One of the best stories I've ever read on Lit. Characters could do with a little more "filling out" and a few small grammatical errors, but let that not detract from the excellence that is this story. I sincerely hope you write a part 2!!!
by
Anonymous10/05/15
REALLY!
30 fucking pages for him to finally get her!
by
Anonymous10/05/15
annony just read 30 fucking pages!! Then he bitched about it being tolong
he's fucking nuts! Gave it a 5 for effort and content
by
Anonymous10/07/15
A fun romp
Could not stop reading. Probably the longest story arc in Literotica history.
by
Anonymous10/10/15
Another outstanding contribution!
An interesting plot, strong character development, great twists = several pleasant nights of willing suspension of disbelief. Thank you.
Was well worth all 32 pages - kept me interested all the way through.
Please keep up the great work :)
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Anonymous10/13/15
i have no words
it was over 30 pages long yes but it was very well worth it. it had content and plot and a main character that one just could not help but love. usually when one reads something from here we wish for the character to be with one person more then the other, but with this particular story there was no such feelings. he belonged to all of them and because of that one can truly enjoy the sexual scenes without a feeling of disgust. (thats probably just me) Just an incredible story over all. Thank you!
by
Anonymous10/16/15
Fantastic Story
Fantastic story that you hopefully continue. It's very refreshing to see erotica written this well. I think the writer could turn this in to an awesome series!
by
Anonymous10/17/15
Great Story
I'm a slow reader, but this was worth the afternoon I spent reading it. I think the writter is well schooled on women and air-conditioning. :)
by
Anonymous10/17/15
50 shades of grey... this was way better....this would make for an interesting movie. job well done. it takes time to read through 32 pages on literotica. i salute the writer and those you helped him. thanks for an awesome story
A must read. Was horny as hell
by
Anonymous10/20/15
well written
This stary is a masterpiece, i enjoyed every second of the read. Please keep up the good work!
I am impressed and will go as far to mention it is by far the best story I have read in a long, long time. I will admit when I first saw the length I was concerned it would not evolve, or more aptly develop too quickly. But you kept the pace consistent, to the point I had to read the entire story in the one piece. Well done!
by
Anonymous10/21/15
One of, if not THE, best.
In all the years that I have popped in and read a story or two, this is the only story I have ever commented on or rated. There was so much that was good and right about the story, it was easy to overlook the occasional typo/mistake. Honestly, I have rarely been so captivated by the actual story. You know a story is good when you share emotions with characters and dread finally hitting the last page. Very well done indeed!
by
Anonymous10/23/15
Much variety in the passionate passages
Each of the women was unique during lovemaking - from the chemistry tutor to the MILFs and, subsequently, his 2nd cousin. The side stories about crooked contractors, a sadistic sorority initiation, a lesbian hook-up, a tantalizing steak seasoning, and vengeful judge were clever.
by
Anonymous10/24/15
Keep it going!
Please keep it going. There are too many unanswered questions......What happened to the judge? Is the tower construction ongoing? What happened with the Food Critic? What was the financial arrangement for the Steak and Fry additions? After such a great story, you can't just stop in midstream.
one of the most captivating stories I've read, they remain baucoup questions in suspond, a sequel to this story is most required. thank you for letting us read such a masterpiece
by
Anonymous10/28/15
sexy story
Great writing. Normally stories are 5-6 pages and a chapter or two. I thought that it would be too long but it held my interest all the way through to the last page.
I was procrastinating about reading a story this long. After a few weeks , I simply had to know if the rave reviews were warranted. After just one page I was hooked. At no point did I consider discontinuing my reading. I found that even with all the various characters and plot twists, I had no problem following the plot and knowing which lady was which. I can only mirror the comments of the previous folks.
Thank you for you fine effort!
PS: I don't understand the difficult that some people (mostly anons) have with understanding the length of a story. It's pretty easy to see.
by
Anonymous11/05/15
This is truly a story
You have achieved what few (amateur) writers can. That is weave a tale that is not only erotic but truly but more than just he did thus and so over and over.
So many skip over the mundane details and what you end up with are several paragraphs of pornography that use the exact same words usually meant to get the reader hot and bothered as quickly as possible. I think that a lot of what is posted here are short fantasies thought up while the writer is... well... you... know...
Keep up the good work, it's writing like this that keeps me coming back to this site.
If all I wanted was a short fantasy to well... you... know..., I'd just use my own imagination.
This was a truly amazing tale of "incest"not really to much of incest thou but I liked the action and the comedy and also the romance of this truly good story I wish the author good luck in a new story creation but keep making story's there good
by
Anonymous11/11/15
nice
Awesome story. Genuine storytelling with feelings. It gets you hooked to it once you start reading. Subtle and neat. Thanks to the person who wrote the story.
by
Anonymous11/13/15
Throroughly enjoyable
Really enjoyed this one. Usually I'm not one for the harem stories, but I felt it worked here. I am hoping for a sequel. Your writing is very enjoyable, keep it up.
Wow this story is like a mini book I loved it and am waiting for more lots more!!! I kinda didn't like that grace only got him after he had done so many other women was hoping they would both be virgins... But all in all a great read and I'm looking for more
by
Anonymous11/25/15
Wow
It took me three days to get through it, but it was awesome. Excellent work.
by
Anonymous11/26/15
Surprised
Great story pulled in couldn't put down.More ?
by
Anonymous11/28/15
Awesome story, loved it would like more please!
by
Anonymous12/06/15
Fantastic
This story was amazing , I could not put it down . It took a few hot nights to read it and I say hot for obvious reasons .Loved the way you brought all the characters together , I was so happy was a virgin . Having Rachel help them with their first time was so sexy , I kinda glad you stayed away from the characters having a threesome .But didn't want the story to finish , hoping we may get an update or some more chapters ...
you wrote quite wonderful short book in terms of normal book pages it is like 300 pages and each one was impossible to not read loved your story
by
Anonymous12/16/15
Awesome
It took me a few nights to complete, but very well written and very real, able to get into the story and love every encounter Ed had with the ladies... keep it coming...
by
Anonymous12/17/15
Wow, just wow
Holy hell that a fantastic read, I'll admit it took a couple of nights to read but the time was well worth it.
You put so much detail into everything it was almost like reading an actual novel. Please keep up the amazing work, and also if you can find both the time and creative genius to write a sequel then I would certainly read the shit out of it :)
"
When she got back to her desk after lunch she saw every station had a bright and shiny metal travel mug perched atop it.
"
LMAO!
You really shocked me with Nina, I was really impressed by how that developed, nice job in making a trite 'standby' into an actual character developing experience.
When you introduce Stephanie and Carolyn in Ch 12 you give a brief description. Later, as Ed meets each individual woman, you give almost no details, even as each encounter progresses. Please be more detailed in what makes each woman unique or don't bother adding so many encounters.
That mini-golf game had me genuinely smiling. Nice bonding moments and lots of fun interaction - well done!
Nice job on the way the women interact. The uncertainty mixed with both desire for Ed and yet for his happiness was a very good combination.
You described in detail how all the women dressed for the restaurant - except Grace and Mishka... why?
Having Rachel there for Grace's first time was inspired - and really well written!
Super finish, one of the few "Six Stars" I would gladly give.
Jason
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Anonymous12/20/15
a mans lover
Great story good start and a great ending. Wish a lot more people would act like this the world wold be a better place with this kind of love.
English
Tag shouldnt be incest, rather it should be group sex
...
Absolutely Excellent
This is by far the best story I have ever read, it beats 50 shades hands down.
OMG!
This was such a wonderful story! 50 Shades eat your heart out! I actually found my eyes were "tearing up" at the end having seen it come to an end...I think further Adventures of Edward and his Ladies are in order.
My absolute favorite story EVER! Held me captive from Chapter 1 to 32.
What a joy this story was....pulled at all the emotions, and the good guy truly won in the end.
Deeply moved
As a gentleman reader I was truely captivated by this story. Please write more and share your love in emotions and words. Thank you for sharing such passion.
Beautifull
Very nicely written good emotions good sex balance
Excellent
Awesome story! Fantastic plot and story line, not just about the sex, but finding loving relationships out of a chaotic past.
One of the best stories I ever read!
One of the best stories I ever have read, I can tell as I read them since 1996. Thank you.
Sequel??
There will, of course, be a follow-on??
Great story!
Very well written. Long, but detailed and interesting with lots of twists and turns. I really, really enjoyed it. Thanks!
Btw, back on page 20 something you called him Joe. Other than that, great editing.
Story was great even without the sex.
I loved to read this for the story as well as the sex.. I would really like to find out the rest of the stories that were left. Did the building the judge was working on get torn down things like that.
After working through all the different women's stories when he got together with his cousin it seemed to end quickly. Was there nothing left to write about?
I do want to say that you write really well and it flowed.
awesome
Great story, great plot! I hope there will be a follow up story that ties up the lose ends and ofc carries on the story of Ed, Grace, Rachel and their friends.
Well done
Despite a very few grammtical errors, this was an excellent story. At first I was a bit put off by Ed's Forrest Gump like persona, but the character really does grow on you. The women are all too perfect, but then this site is about fantasies anyway. You've left a lot of possibilities for other story lines and I hope you're going to do the same excellent job with them eventually.
Mishka and Heather
Please continue Mishka and heathers relationship. I would love to feel the chemestry between them. Also give Lydia a little more attention as I felt she was a very REAL charachter where Angie, Steph and Carolyn were all jumbled and confused and their storys were narrow and were nore story plot fillers than anything Lydia was more real and interesting and I wish she had nore of a purpose.
Well written story
Outstanding story -- I hope you continue the series. It was 32 pages but an excellent read
Great story
One of the best stories I've ever read on Lit. Characters could do with a little more "filling out" and a few small grammatical errors, but let that not detract from the excellence that is this story. I sincerely hope you write a part 2!!!
REALLY!
30 fucking pages for him to finally get her!
annony just read 30 fucking pages!! Then he bitched about it being tolong
he's fucking nuts! Gave it a 5 for effort and content
A fun romp
Could not stop reading. Probably the longest story arc in Literotica history.
Another outstanding contribution!
An interesting plot, strong character development, great twists = several pleasant nights of willing suspension of disbelief. Thank you.
Excellent
Great story - Loved every bit of it :)
Was well worth all 32 pages - kept me interested all the way through.
Please keep up the great work :)
i have no words
it was over 30 pages long yes but it was very well worth it. it had content and plot and a main character that one just could not help but love. usually when one reads something from here we wish for the character to be with one person more then the other, but with this particular story there was no such feelings. he belonged to all of them and because of that one can truly enjoy the sexual scenes without a feeling of disgust. (thats probably just me) Just an incredible story over all. Thank you!
Fantastic Story
Fantastic story that you hopefully continue. It's very refreshing to see erotica written this well. I think the writer could turn this in to an awesome series!
Great Story
I'm a slow reader, but this was worth the afternoon I spent reading it. I think the writter is well schooled on women and air-conditioning. :)
50 shades of grey... this was way better....this would make for an interesting movie. job well done. it takes time to read through 32 pages on literotica. i salute the writer and those you helped him. thanks for an awesome story
A must read. Was horny as hell
well written
This stary is a masterpiece, i enjoyed every second of the read. Please keep up the good work!
Excellent and well constructed storyline!
I am impressed and will go as far to mention it is by far the best story I have read in a long, long time. I will admit when I first saw the length I was concerned it would not evolve, or more aptly develop too quickly. But you kept the pace consistent, to the point I had to read the entire story in the one piece. Well done!
One of, if not THE, best.
In all the years that I have popped in and read a story or two, this is the only story I have ever commented on or rated. There was so much that was good and right about the story, it was easy to overlook the occasional typo/mistake. Honestly, I have rarely been so captivated by the actual story. You know a story is good when you share emotions with characters and dread finally hitting the last page. Very well done indeed!
Much variety in the passionate passages
Each of the women was unique during lovemaking - from the chemistry tutor to the MILFs and, subsequently, his 2nd cousin. The side stories about crooked contractors, a sadistic sorority initiation, a lesbian hook-up, a tantalizing steak seasoning, and vengeful judge were clever.
Keep it going!
Please keep it going. There are too many unanswered questions......What happened to the judge? Is the tower construction ongoing? What happened with the Food Critic? What was the financial arrangement for the Steak and Fry additions? After such a great story, you can't just stop in midstream.
THX
one of the most captivating stories I've read, they remain baucoup questions in suspond, a sequel to this story is most required. thank you for letting us read such a masterpiece
sexy story
Great writing. Normally stories are 5-6 pages and a chapter or two. I thought that it would be too long but it held my interest all the way through to the last page.
Fantastic job!
I was procrastinating about reading a story this long. After a few weeks , I simply had to know if the rave reviews were warranted. After just one page I was hooked. At no point did I consider discontinuing my reading. I found that even with all the various characters and plot twists, I had no problem following the plot and knowing which lady was which. I can only mirror the comments of the previous folks.
Thank you for you fine effort!
PS: I don't understand the difficult that some people (mostly anons) have with understanding the length of a story. It's pretty easy to see.
This is truly a story
You have achieved what few (amateur) writers can. That is weave a tale that is not only erotic but truly but more than just he did thus and so over and over.
So many skip over the mundane details and what you end up with are several paragraphs of pornography that use the exact same words usually meant to get the reader hot and bothered as quickly as possible. I think that a lot of what is posted here are short fantasies thought up while the writer is... well... you... know...
Keep up the good work, it's writing like this that keeps me coming back to this site.
If all I wanted was a short fantasy to well... you... know..., I'd just use my own imagination.
The old man who lives in the other shoe
Perfect mix
This was a truly amazing tale of "incest"not really to much of incest thou but I liked the action and the comedy and also the romance of this truly good story I wish the author good luck in a new story creation but keep making story's there good
nice
Awesome story. Genuine storytelling with feelings. It gets you hooked to it once you start reading. Subtle and neat. Thanks to the person who wrote the story.
Throroughly enjoyable
Really enjoyed this one. Usually I'm not one for the harem stories, but I felt it worked here. I am hoping for a sequel. Your writing is very enjoyable, keep it up.
I liked it, I also am not that into harem stories but seriously this just. I could see your vision.
also
gordon freeman is that you?
Nice ...
Well enjoyed the story, more like a mini book with twists and turns, got well engrossed, great writing, maybe you should become a novelist.
Thanks 5*
The Aunt.....
The character of the Aunt really put me off. Even if she is his cousin once removed.
More?!
Wow this story is like a mini book I loved it and am waiting for more lots more!!! I kinda didn't like that grace only got him after he had done so many other women was hoping they would both be virgins... But all in all a great read and I'm looking for more
Wow
It took me three days to get through it, but it was awesome. Excellent work.
Surprised
Great story pulled in couldn't put down.More ?
Awesome story, loved it would like more please!
Fantastic
This story was amazing , I could not put it down . It took a few hot nights to read it and I say hot for obvious reasons .Loved the way you brought all the characters together , I was so happy was a virgin . Having Rachel help them with their first time was so sexy , I kinda glad you stayed away from the characters having a threesome .But didn't want the story to finish , hoping we may get an update or some more chapters ...
one of the best
you wrote quite wonderful short book in terms of normal book pages it is like 300 pages and each one was impossible to not read loved your story
Awesome
It took me a few nights to complete, but very well written and very real, able to get into the story and love every encounter Ed had with the ladies... keep it coming...
Wow, just wow
Holy hell that a fantastic read, I'll admit it took a couple of nights to read but the time was well worth it.
You put so much detail into everything it was almost like reading an actual novel. Please keep up the amazing work, and also if you can find both the time and creative genius to write a sequel then I would certainly read the shit out of it :)
Excellent!
"
When she got back to her desk after lunch she saw every station had a bright and shiny metal travel mug perched atop it.
"
LMAO!
You really shocked me with Nina, I was really impressed by how that developed, nice job in making a trite 'standby' into an actual character developing experience.
When you introduce Stephanie and Carolyn in Ch 12 you give a brief description. Later, as Ed meets each individual woman, you give almost no details, even as each encounter progresses. Please be more detailed in what makes each woman unique or don't bother adding so many encounters.
That mini-golf game had me genuinely smiling. Nice bonding moments and lots of fun interaction - well done!
Nice job on the way the women interact. The uncertainty mixed with both desire for Ed and yet for his happiness was a very good combination.
You described in detail how all the women dressed for the restaurant - except Grace and Mishka... why?
Having Rachel there for Grace's first time was inspired - and really well written!
Super finish, one of the few "Six Stars" I would gladly give.
Jason
a mans lover
Great story good start and a great ending. Wish a lot more people would act like this the world wold be a better place with this kind of love.
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