Either get someone who speaks English to proof-read for you
or write in your own language (Some Indian dialect, I'm guessing), this disjointed crap is almost unreadable. I know you believe, in common with most Indian/Pakistani authors here, that your English is grammatically perfect, but believe me, as a native English speaker, I should tell you that you're sadly mistaken. There may be a good story in here, but your idiosyncratic and erratic grammar have disguised that fact completely; you can't translate Indian colloquial idiom directly into English and expect it to make sense, because it doesn't. So instead, what we have here is genuine gibberish. Please, either get a native English speaker to edit and proof-read for you, or stay away and save the moderator's time to audit stories that people will actually be able to read and enjoy. I doubt you'll listen to me, but I had to let you know just how bad and incoherent this story is, and how poor your command of English actually is.
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Either get someone who speaks English to proof-read for you
or write in your own language (Some Indian dialect, I'm guessing), this disjointed crap is almost unreadable. I know you believe, in common with most Indian/Pakistani authors here, that your English is grammatically perfect, but believe me, as a native English speaker, I should tell you that you're sadly mistaken. There may be a good story in here, but your idiosyncratic and erratic grammar have disguised that fact completely; you can't translate Indian colloquial idiom directly into English and expect it to make sense, because it doesn't. So instead, what we have here is genuine gibberish. Please, either get a native English speaker to edit and proof-read for you, or stay away and save the moderator's time to audit stories that people will actually be able to read and enjoy. I doubt you'll listen to me, but I had to let you know just how bad and incoherent this story is, and how poor your command of English actually is.
don`t read if yo don`t like
why can`t these people simply skip it if they don
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