The Porn Crisis

2 stars

No emotion in this. The dialogue is mechanical and flat. No matter if they are sad happy or horny, it is all delivered in the same monotonous tone and repeated diatribe. Maybe you're better in your native tongue. At least I hope so.

Too much adolecsent fantasy Stev2244

Not enough reality. Take that as a reality check. Most of your audience is in their 50s and 60s. Most of your audience on Loving Wives has had at least one failed marriage due to the actions of their spouse. Very few indiividuals of this majority audience is what most others would call part of a BTB crowd.

So why are you targeting your writing for the weak willed and/or cuckold fantasy loving set of folks while saying it is retaliation for the BTB crowd? You cannot disguise the fact your males are weak and very indecisive. Typical Cuck lovers fare and writing.

It just does not add up. I have yet to read one of your stories and had one single reply, that indicated anyone from the BTB mindset even cared.

Enjoy your jokes it's your pen after all. You seem more interest in that area than in writing popular wide appeal fiction.

I for one will not be reading any new material from Stev2244.

BTW: I personally do not believe in BTB. I do however believe in getting shut of negative spouses and people.

Good luck in your future endeavours.

AM
FRG 1981-1985

Are the BTB fantasy stories threaten the cheaters, lover boys, bulls?

@LostOneThere BTB is fantasy as the 90% of the stories in the storycollections.
Naturally there are some good idea in the BTB stories (as the secret deposits or to show the evidence of the cheating to above 16 years old kids, parents in laws, near friends, relatives and near collegues, but not bigger circulars (because that is felony), to find better second/third wives, to destroy the job or marriages of the lovers, etc...).
I do not understand why it is so annoying the cuck supporters the BTB stories if the BTB stories are fanasy stories. Is the BTB fantasy is a threatening possibility for cheaters, loverboys, bulls?

REGRETS YOU HAD A FEW

and then love dumped common sense. TK U MLJ LV NV

Why do you hate men?

Seriously, get help.

1 star.

That's just bad.

Uncompelling dialogue, and yet anothe famale caricature.

Your story concepts are genuinely good, to the point that I'm trying to read all your stories on one go, but I'm starting to lose hope. Your female characters almost all seem to be simplistic caricatures, and it's not as the male characters are that much better.

Particularly troubling is how your female characters always start off as oblivious narcisists and then do a complete 180 and become uterly devouted (but manipulative) doormats; and your male characters seem to be ruled by their cocks.

Time To Regroup

Your strong points are your story outlines. You have some marvelous story ideas. But your characters continue to be... excuse the pun...lacking in character. Ellen was not only a complete airhead, but she was also stubborn, self-centered, unfeeling, and arrogant. Not once did she see the pain and humiliation she heaped upon her husband. And like so many wives, she thought she could shit on her husband and her marriage and cuckold her husband on an epic level...worldwide...and he would welcome her back with open arms. Only an effeminate wimp would do that. Ninety-five percent of all men would have gladly turned her over to Ramon or else put a gun to her head and pulled the trigger. That happens more often than rediculous recon iliation. One star.

Yet another empty story where the husband takes the cheating wife back, but at least the porn angle is a bit unusual makes it feel less cliched.
The husband should have thought about how it would be to have the video of his wife in a porn movie hanging over their head for the rest of their live, if I were him I would at least have demanded she found some way to have that scene removed from circulation where possibly before taking her back.

Sorry,

but this was really badly written.

It's good.

Not exactly what I was looking for, but yeah.it made a good read. Story's well thought. Allover. It's good.

Very entertaining

I enjoyed reading it. Yes it had some stuff that could have been better, but it was entertaining. Personally I am a bit tired of the husband ranting and raging at the wife. I often agree with the characters reconnecting. Personally, If I were him (god forbid), and loved her, I'd encourage her to stay there and be a big star. Let her make some bucks, and 'fulfill herself'. Might as well help her be self sufficient, and stay in California. Try to move on.

Any way. Keep it up

Chilley

What a Crock of Shit

No way!! Divorce her stupid, cheatin, bitch of an ass and let her porn lover Ramon have her.

Dude? Seriously?

I am pretty sure after reading most of what you've written that you're a closet cuck. You want your wife to actually cheat on you. And the only way you can express those fantasies is by writing crap like this. I bet if you told your wife about your fantasies she'd drop you like yesterday's newspaper. And you try to compensate by writing all the impossible reconciliations. Go see a shrink. Will help you deal with your problem more than writing these stories.

Stev

Hey man I am reading the comments and I just want to say I don't think you're a cuck or anything. I enjoyed the story and the emotional roller coaster it took me on. The writing was great and I am happy to have read this work. Thanks for putting your time and effort into this and I'll look forward to reading more of your work! :)

what's your point?

every story you write is more of the same old plot.

Porn ? reconciliation?

I´ve liked your stories of reconciliation. This one left me kind of on the sidelines. She regrets what she did. But she should have thought how something like this would affect her marriage before she did it. Forgive her? If my late wife had ran into somebody and had sex with him. I could have forgiven her for her lapse of judgement. But this lady quit her job and drove all the way to LA. With the intent of having sex with Ramon That is no accident. Then she doesn´t realize she did something wrong until her husband is fixing to leave her? cause she was already excited to star in another movie. I just couldn´t forgive somebody the would do something like that to me. This wasn´t a spur of the moment thing. This was premeditated without regard as to what it would do to her husband. She had her fun now she wants forgiveness. If my late wife had told me she would make it up to me the first thing I would have asked was can you unfuck yourself? Or can you reverse the time to before you did it? Cause thats the only way you can make it up.

Reconciliations are fine… RAACs can be disturbing

And this RAAC is very disturbing, and I’ll be specific (and hopefully constructive) in my critique.

She completely ignores his feelings and the rules of their relationship to leave for three weeks to “publicly cheat” on him with Ramon, and he only expresses 'concerns' for their relationship. He only seriously contemplates divorce when he realizes he’s not confident enough to satisfy her – and even then, he contemplates ending their relationship reluctantly ("Ellen, I'm totally destroyed and sad about it. But I think I will have to divorce you.").

Why aren’t there any trust issues? It sure doesn’t seem as if they had an open marriage – although one could hardly tell by her entitled attitude. Further, the incredible delay in her realizing the hurt she has caused is bordering on the sociopathic. They never really even attempt to identify and work on trust issues… they only try to rebuild his confidence to the point where he can redeem himself as capable of sexually fulfilling her.

This seems to be a dangerously subservient male character that doesn’t appear to have any sense of self-worth and lives only to please his wife. ("I love you, Ellen. But I'm not man enough to keep you. You will always think of Ramon when we have sex. I will always think of him too. We both don't want it, but we have already lost each other. Our marriage won't work without sex. You need to find someone with a huge cock and then try to keep his confidence intact.")

I feel so sad for this man who seems to be lacking any sense of identity other than as a vehicle to serve his mistress: (“It's the saddest thing I've ever done. But I actually file for divorce, rent an apartment and move my stuff there. She can keep our rented house and I agree to support her financially.”)

This reconciliation feels like a tragedy, and extension of an unhealthy purgatory for our protagonist hubby.

Sorry the only story I did not like

I said all your stories are masterpieces but this I did not like.Sorry.