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Well plotted!
The ending was short and sweet, but the author maybe needed to tie up some loose ends and spell things out for folk who didn't read the story carefully. The wife was interviewed at the hospital and presumably gave a statement that she did in fact fall down the stairs. So no chance of claiming the hubby was a wife beater. The auther described Vanessa as "one of those kindly big strong momma types". Being a "momma type" is not the same as having kids.
TOO SHORT!
Good story potential that could have been longer with more detail.
Original...
manner through which he discovered his wife's infidelity. I'm glad I read it.
Certainly a five.
Jedd Clampett
Only Fair
I'm sorry, I would have walked in on them and clocked Martin, then Wendy that if she wanted to save our marriage she would quit her job and file a sexual harassment suit against Martin.
If, as seems likely, it was consensual, that would be Martin's defense, and if he could back it up, that would be Dave's grounds for divorce.
Loved this story
A totally new twist that I have not encountered before. I just feel the ending was very abrupt and warranted at least another page of storytelling.
So that's it? No emotion, no explanation?
Kind of a cartoon for a story. See Wendy. See Martin. See Wendy fuck Martin. Isn't this an exciting story?
No.
Very funny
I wonder how many people thought Dave beat his wife again after Vanessa put bruises on her bruises? A little more at the end would have been nice.
Rather thin or lacking in emotional energy and understanding. Why did she do it?
How did she explain it? What happened to Martin? Your stories relate interesting events, but lack introspection into motives, attitudes, and explanations. So your stories read like outlines instead of what happened, but not why or how, which is the most interesting parts. You give us more detail about what wine you had with a meal then why, when where, and how his wife decided to commit adultery. Was this the first time? How did her parents respond?
It could have been a really interesting story. Thanks for the effort.
Confrontatio!
It seems you steer away from confrontation like in Red riding hood! Like your writing though!
Good Neighbors
I agree with those who question how neighbors (and co-workers?) could be so aware of the affair that they were sure that he beat Wendy, but nobody tells him?!
the story is
really about a man as dumb as a post and not very good.
&√ Puzzling
You have Marting saying he will end affair, neighbors interceding for Martin because he has kids, but Martin continues to plow away.
Since neighbors all knew about affair and husbands wanted him to overlook it he should have started bedding their wives
√&√
More Euro Cuckshit...Pussy Author 1*
After reading your wimpy, non-confrontational garbage, I have concluded you're a wimp. Man-Up!!! You also have trouble writing character motivation and your endings suck.
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