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ChequamegonChequamegonover 8 years ago
Nice short story

Not too bad for a short story. Quite a few minor typos. Needs to be gone over or find an editor. Keep writing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
Pretty good.........

.....for half a story!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 years ago

Loved the part about her squirting. That makes for a very intimate momeny- almost as much as him blowing inside her. Good story for a short one.

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