A Virgin's Tale

Nice Story So Far

I like it I think it's a really good start. I can't wait to see what's next!

I think it could be really great. But It's going to fast with not enough details. They barely know each other , they're dancing, they're discussing sex and then having it..but you want this to be a continuing story? Slow down. build the characters so the sex is mind blowing

Where does these people come from who can't make their own decisions. A writer who can not develop a plot with real characters, who are have someone else making their decisions, leaves it impossible to develope a believable story.,