All Comments on 'Cosmic Conditions Ch. 02'

It had been a good story up to that time. Why is it that boys and young men that finally get their mother want to show off and share with your friends (or in this case, a stranger)? For me, this spoiled an otherwise excellent story. I lost interest and just skimmed the rest of the story. Maybe your next story you can stay on task and not ruin it by interjecting a stranger. Just my opinion, good luck in your writing.